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| Hazmatt 2008-05-06 ch 1,  | abuseGreat chapter! I really enjoyed it! |
| Unleashed Gummy Sweets 2008-04-30 ch 8, | abusewow. |
| Unleashed Gummy Sweets 2008-04-30 ch 6, | abuseaw i love angela! |
| Unleashed Gummy Sweets 2008-04-30 ch 5, | abuseah! oh la la! i love it! |
| Unleashed Gummy Sweets 2008-04-30 ch 4, | abusei don't either! te he! |
| BuffyChino 2007-11-24 ch 5, | abuseyou rock the first bones story iread was enough to make me want to never watch the show again ( and thats bad seeing it is my fav show i'm obsessed) but your story so far is like 120/100 i love it so good ps my spelling/ grammer is not that good but there is nothing wrong with yours |
| chocolatefan 2007-10-14 ch 8, | abuseCool! Great Chapter! |
| canadianagurl 2007-10-04 ch 8, | abuseLOL!! Talk about that little incident in the room adding..or even breaking the sexual tensioin between them! |
| saturn567 2007-10-04 ch 8, | abuseawesome ending! |
| MegMann 2007-10-04 ch 7, | abuseoh yeah! oh yeah! GREAT |
| saturn567 2007-10-04 ch 7, | abusehaha, awesome update! |
| Hot-Blooded 2007-10-04 ch 7, | abuseAwesome fic, but just a little advice: Firstly-try and make your writing flow a little more. It's really good, but you seem to jump around a bit. In this chap, Ange and Bren spend almost no time shopping...Ange would easily be able tospend a whole day taking Bren shopping, maybe a little more detail there could have been better. Secondly-This is just a suggestion, but maybe you should get a beta (not me, cos I hate correcting grammer mistakes and am terrible at it), but look around at other peoples fics and see who their beta's are, and maybe ask if anyone would like to do your fic. Finally-Don't leave every chap at a cliffy. While a few are good to keep people guessing, too many and people will begin to lose interest. This is just some creative crit from a fanfic reader, and definately not a writer (I have no imagination, and would not be game enough to post anything (congrats on writing so well btw)). Awesome fic though, and keep updating. :) |
| Halfpastdead001 2007-10-04 ch 7, | abuseo a good fic keep going |
| HeroesBonesSNPB 2007-10-03 ch 7, | abusethis is a nice story!! good job! :) :P :D |
| saturn567 2007-09-30 ch 5, | abusethis chapter was hilarous! |