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Wow...mean old trainer got what he deserved I captured a lvl 3 magicarp and he is almost evolved now I NEVER get angery at my pokemon... If you win its becuse of your pokemon but if you lose Its your own fualt. A great saying...

This story was well written. There were a few minor mistakes, but nothing too egregious.

I agree with the saying. In my opinion, a trainer who is kind to their Magikarp becomes a trainer with a loyal Gyarados. And a trainer who is cruel to their Magikarp will have a VERY annoyed Pokemon of mass destruction on their hands when it evolves.

Very good... And it wasn't confusing at all. If you ask me you're great at nameless trainer/pokemon fics. Ok I just have to say this: you said at the end that you didn't call the trainer Damien because then we would just think it was Damien abusing magikarp like charmander. But... In your stories Damien was the one who betrayed houndoom and his pack, AND the one that slaughtered his golduck and two houndour. Sorry, i'm Running out of good reviews because I've reviewed too many of your stories today.

this reminds me of another saying: Gyrados ANGRY. Gyrodos SMASH. yeah. how'd ya like them apples? lol

i like your explanations for why pokemon act like they do in certain situations. they are very realistic.

I actually found this funny. I'm not sure why. I love Magikarp. Instead of being a reasonable person and catching a level 19 Magikarp on the Pokemon games so that it would only have to grow one level, I caught a level 8 Magikarp and battled with it. I believe I beat a level 12 Zigzagoon with it when it was at level 10. It's evolved by now, at level 34, female and named Dragoa. They should get more respect; they evolve into one of the best Pokemon ever, and they used to be really really strong.

POWER TO THE MAGIKARP!

It wasn't hard to follow. But it does give a good purpose for a Gyarados to be violent.

I've been reading your stuff for a while and all I can say is good job with this one. The guy deserved to be ripped to shreds.

What would happen if you wrote an NC-17 Angst story?

I wuv this. Go Magikarp! I remember that James kicked his Magikarp and it evolved and tried to kill him.

Very well-written!I hope you write more fics.

I LOVE ALL OF THESE DARK, DISMAL AND DEPRESSING FANFICS!

A saddening story. With an inevitable, desperate conclusion.

The conclusion is almost too predictable, because you make the Pokemon kill the human. Don't you do that a bit too often? It loses impact after one has read enough of your fics.

Besides, why kill? I could understand hit, beat, maim; all of those are things that the Pokemon learned from its trainer. But when was the trainer likely to kill in front of his Magikarp? And since he had taken such trouble to raise it, he would most likely have had the Magikarp from an early level, so that most of what the Magikarp knew, it would have learnt from its trainer.

Even more depressing (and your fic was good in that it imbued the reader with the angry, depressed emotions of the Pokemon) were your closing author's notes.

If you can anticipate criticism, then end your fic with a simple explanation of why you did the something that might invite criticism. Don't load it with emotional baggage; just explain. Commenting 'following this story shouldn't have been hard' and adding 'if (it)... was still hard to follow, tell me and I'll try to do better next time...' reduces your maturity level in the reader's mind.

I wish you hadn't maimed your superb fanfic by ending on such a sulky note. In my opinion, your fanfic was perfectly clear and the way you handled pronouns only clarified the story.

Hellooooo. That was very nice of you to do, rip the trainer apart. He deserved it, kicking around that poor, defenseless Magikarp. Of course, I'm not too partial to the fishies myself, but hey, why not defend them?