Can't believe I never commented Padfoot, but then again, I kinda forgot you wrote this...hey you haven't been on here since what a million years...lol...now on to the review that will be from a totally a neutral point of view...deal if it's harsh, we've known each other for ages...

Run on sentences (okay I'll admit I do that too, sometimes)

Unnecessary capitalization

Opinion - Lily would NEVER marry Snape...never...

Spelling (sticks tongue out)

Another Opinion - If James was eighteen at the time, that means that Lily and Snape were dating secretly during seventh year...no way they could have kept that from James...

Puncuation (hey whatever, i said harsh)

Yet Another Opinion - Hypothetically, if Lily and "Snape" were getting married, I'd seriously doubt they'd invite Sirius...

Well, aside from all that, it was still really good. (don't look so confused, i never said i didn't like it, lol). I love that you used Behind These Hazel Eyes, so perfect! James' emotions were dead on. I really felt his pain. Maybe if you ever decide to come back here, you can trash one of my stories...lol...which you shouldn't be offended really, what kind of friend would i be if i wasn't completely honest...besides...

"When you fall, a friend will help you up and ask if you're all right. A best friend will help you up, laugh, (maybe ask if you're ok) and then push you back down again."

Sums up our friendship, doesn't it?

- Moony

i liked it, but in the beginning all of your words are capitalized and the sentences are awkward. nice plot though!

poor james. you have to write more. please.