This is great! I like how little Elphie speaks just as eloquently as adult Elphie. And she doesn't say "Daddy" haha!

That was so sweet! I knew Frex coudn't be all bad!

Aw...Frex isn't an evil bastard "father".

Nitpicks first:

'and pushed away' - do you mean 'pulled away' or 'pushed him away'?

“Defiantly cliché.” - do you mean "definitely cliche"

Otherwise it was good, and i could see that happening to some extent, especially in the book.

I enjoyed it.

And now I'm going to be so so so naughty [I don't normally do this]

New story: Goodbye Love: Please R and R.

*favourites*

You are swiftly becoming a known writer on this section - for all good reasons.