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banana-san
2008-04-08 . chapter 28
some were funny ,some were sad some were hard to understand ,but ultimately i like them all
Miss Sketch
2008-04-04 . chapter 28
All of these were wonderful. I seriously giggled out loud at the first one ("havemybabiezplzkthx"? Really? xD).

One suggestion: I looked over your Italian in chapter 8 and have the beensiest of corrections, should you decide to incorporate them:

Non me ne frego niente, cornuto.

La cosa piu' grande che tu mai imparerai è solo amare ed essere amato nel ritorno.

Vieni via con me e ci baceremo.

Le storie d'amore reali non hanno mai i conclusioni felici, perché le storie d'amore reali non finiscono mai. (What a lovely quote.)

Just me being picky, please feel no personal affront or anything. The drabbles were delightful!

Miss Sketch
SmileyMoFo
2008-02-09 . chapter 6
These were so good

I went through, like, 12 different emotions reading this.

My favorite part was this chapter, when Denton asked

"Um, Jack Kelly. Why are you gay?"

"Because boys have a penis and girls have a vagina."

Ha. That was great. Made my day.
Raven's Wing
2007-09-26 . chapter 8
This one is a bit lost in translation. The scrolling up and down was confusing at times.
Raven's Wing
2007-09-26 . chapter 7
Poor Race and the short jokes. He'll never get a break, will he?
Raven's Wing
2007-09-26 . chapter 6
Ha. Denton being hideous. That's good.
Raven's Wing
2007-09-26 . chapter 4
Oh.

That has so many possible meanings (and the first ones that popped into my mind were dirty. Does that make me an awful person?).
Raven's Wing
2007-09-26 . chapter 3
Interesting comparison. I really like the last line of this. Writing shots like this is a really great exercise for writers because it forces them to cut out the BS and make sure that they get their point across. This is proof that you can tell a whole story in just 100 words. True there is some fill in the blanks that has to happen, but that is part of the fun of reading these. The imagination has room to play with the ideas you introduce.
Raven's Wing
2007-09-26 . chapter 2
hm. slashy themes. I'm not big on slash, but the sexual innuendo is nicely done.
Raven's Wing
2007-09-26 . chapter 1
Ha. I laughed out lout (not lol'd, but actually laughed out loud). You really built it up to be something profound, but it really just turned out to be a horny teenage boy letter. Ha. That was great.
Miniola
2007-09-26 . chapter 8
Oh my gosh- these are amazing. Especially this last one, I loved it. I'm taking German myself, this year, so seeing this was hilarious. Great job.

Miniola
hilby
2007-09-23 . chapter 8
Oh, shit! You know German? Oh my god. Help me with my German conversations...BITTE!

This is way cute. All of them. I am partial to Sprace, of course...especially almost dirty foreign language talk Sprace.
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