... wierd...

but wait... who killed who in the first chapter? And why everything so... uhm... I was not here(shifty eyes) MOOSE!!(runs off... but you don't need to know that...)

wow... It's so DARK in here...

maybe try angst, it suits the mood better.

Poor Fish, may he rest in peace... :)
Anyways, I can hardly wait for the next chapter. You have piqued my interest!
Update as fast as humanly possible,
avikar

Wow, tihs story cpatured me right from the first sentence. A hard task, so be proud of yourself, lol.

I hope you continue, I will save this story to my favourites and check back regularly in hope of updates :)

Um...so does Naruto die in the end, or waas that just a haunting vision she was having (please tell me it's the latter)? I think you should continue it because I'm always curious about the direction a story goes. I really like naruto/oc pairings so I'll continue to read if you decide to continue.

OMG this was so sad! it reminds me of something and it makes me want to cut my slef! :(

What the fuck was that you fricken bitch? I hate you! I hate you so much that I love your internal organs, and I love you internal organs so much that I want to rip them out and feast on the pungent juices. m... want a bite?

...kinda confusing, but very good written...
please keep on writing...?

ThiefSuzy~

... man i'm speechless, you really are an amazing writer