 Erik'sTrueAngel 2009-07-30 . chapter 1Loved the major angst going on in this story. Finally happy Clark told Lois the truth, but I was close to tears when she left him. Great story! |
 TwilightBEL 2008-11-11 . chapter 1I am so glad that you posted this so I am not one of those people PMing you to write it! LOL
This was a GREAT reveal. I loved the build up of seeing Lois dreading to talk to Clark all week. She is dreading it for all the wrong reasons, though. It really was fitting how well it went with BJW. I am amazed at how well you jump from the POV of one character to another.
My chest aches for Clark as once again someone he desperately loves pushes him away. I am now hoping that another of your one shots has the meeting they had where they worked things out years later and FINALLY came together! I actually would like to see one of Lois breaking the news to Richard that Clark is Superman. In BJW, Richard seemed VERY upset with Clark which makes sense. Even though Clark had lied to them all, only Lois and Jason ever loved him and had the capacity or a reason to forgive him.
I hope to see more SUPER stories from you in the future! :o) |
 Akin 2008-10-28 . chapter 1 I just read this story and found it great. However, I hate you and here is why: YOU STOPPED WRITING IT! WHERE'S THE NEXT CHAPTER!? :( This is torture. You should know not to write great stories and not continue them - so not cool, Alphie :( |
 pianoplayeres 2008-06-28 . chapter 1You did a beautiful job with this story! I was just wondering if you could write it again, from Clarks point of view, and or Jason's? That would be really cool, since you are such a talented writer! Thanks again! |
 NiteAngel 2007-11-08 . chapter 1 aw...
poor clark...my heart just breaks for him!
give more background info on exactly what took place in 'being jason white'
nicely written!
i'm going to see what else u've written = )
i think i should read in the shadow of my father one...but i'm afraid i'll get hooked and won't get anything done around the house = s
NiteAngel
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 Moonlight234 2007-10-05 . chapter 1wow, it was really good, and I'm glad she just didn't fall into his arms like.."i Love you too!" I think that this has more depth than a lot of the other ones |
 alphamaniax 2007-10-01 . chapter 1Another wonderful story by Alphie. I loved it, it was soo angsty. It was just really good. |
 Classic Cowboy 2007-09-27 . chapter 1ok. That was perfect! I've been following your Jason White series for a while now and the longer it went on the worse I knew the revelation would be. hit it right on the money my friend. Update soon this is gonna be good! |
 Wahoogal06 2007-09-25 . chapter 1Oh man that must have driven Clark CRAZY the way she was brushing him off...even dragging Richard in on it too! That moment where she whispered into the phone "Play along", I bet Clark wanted to crawl out of his skin. Out of the whole piece though, this was the line that killed me:
"I slammed the door behind me, not stopping to even acknowledge the sob I heard from behind me. I don’t know how my feet managed it, but somehow I made it downstairs and out curbside where I hailed a taxi."
Clark was crying. Not that I didn't think he could, or would, it's just something you NEVER see in a Superman story. Lois has every right to be angry with him, but to literally see and hear her break his heart into pieces...that was just too much... |
 Trekkie6 2007-09-24 . chapter 1Hehe ‘Going Under’. When I saw that in my email, I immediately started singing the song by Evanescence. Totally forgot about that song…
{I hope you can find some difference in this one given that there is over twenty years history here. If not – oh well. I tried.} You scare me when you say that. On one hand, you’re phenomenal at what you do and I think you’re just worrying too much. On the other hand, you know how good you are and you still have doubts…that’s scary. I’m just gonna shut up and read cuz I’ve been waiting for this forever and it’s finally here. Besides, I’ll never be able to get my work done if I don’t…
Wow, I’m really stupid, sitting here reading these lyrics and wondering why they sound so familiar. *rolls eyes at self*
{I was typing away at my computer when he came up behind me, clumsy and awkward as always.} I wondered if Clark would be the one who wouldn’t leave her alone.
{He, of all people, should know better than to interrupt a writer when the getting is good.} Heck yes!
{Later? Did he mean… after work? “Later I’m going home,” I said pointedly.} Hm. What’s the matter, Lois? Afraid he’ll kiss you or something?
{Something was wrong with my friend} Some friend you are. You just told him you didn’t have time to talk to him before you went home.
{I’d never felt like a giddy schoolgirl around him, like I did around…anyways,} Pause noted.
{I wasn’t about to let him make a fool of himself and tell me something that I didn’t want to hear.} Something that you didn’t need to hear because you already suspected.
{Besides, I was married. Why would he want to tell me he had feelings for me when he knew I was married and completely off the market? It wasn’t as if I was going to up and leave Richard for Clark Kent.} All very interesting questions. Interesting that she never thought there could have been something more to it, but I guess her reporter’s instincts don’t kick in when it’s something involving her.
{I would just have to avoid him and save him from himself.} Ignoring the problem never solves it.
Tuesday I feel like I’m watching The Ring. Every time the day of the week comes up, I hear that ‘dun dun’ sound, lol
{She wants to have you and dad over soon so she can use the china.} Question is, will she wanna go over there after the bleep has hit the fan?
{“If you haven’t, no biggie. Just call me when you do.} He wants to talk to her soon after she finds out? I’d be scared of getting pulled into the middle of it.
{“Play along with me, okay?”} *scoff* Like Clark wouldn’t hear that. Not that she would know that but…*sigh* That poor man. He finally has to tell her and she keeps pushing him away.
{I heard someone say that Clark had gone home ill. A quick glance over at his desk confirmed that he wasn’t there. Curious.} Why, cuz he never gets sick? Maybe he just got sick of being dissed.
{You’d think after all these years that I wouldn’t be so impressed} He’s the father of your son and the love of your life. Why wouldn’t you be?
{It upset me because I felt we should have at least seen each other the day our son got married.} Oh, you definitely saw him. Looked right into his eyes and danced in his arms.
{It was just my luck that the man I wanted to talk to was keeping his distance while the man I didn’t want to talk to wouldn’t leave me alone.} That’s still funny. Even more so now that we know she’s talking about the same person.
{ main players.} Main players? Of an earthquake?
{I froze at the way he said the name. I didn’t like it.} Apparently, neither did he. You’re doing what you always do. Drop everything for Superman whilst ignoring Clark. I think he’s tired of being ignored this time.
{“Sorry, Clark. Richard is going out of town tomorrow and we’re having a special night tonight.”} *says nothing*
{It was getting too frustrating to keep lying to him, but he wasn’t giving me much of a choice.} Has she even talked to Jason since he’s been back? I’m sure he’d be pushing her to talk to him as well, though, that could be one reason she wouldn’t be calling him…
{Meet me on the roof at 8:00 tonight. A friend.} Clever. When in doubt, go with what works.
{It was my hope that he had gone home for the weekend.} Thank God it’s the weekend. She’s not gonna wanna see his mug for good long while.
{I could see his familiar silhouette even in the dark. No one stood like he did. No one on earth had his frame or his shape.} But in which suit?
{“Clark!” I began to panic. “Oh my gosh!”} Made ya jump outta your skin didn’t it?
{“Who did you think I was?”
“No one,” I said. “It was silly.”} Girl, you’ve been outted. Just give it up already.
{“Yes, actually. I got a note from him.”} Heh. That’s what you think.
{“How did you even know? About the note, I mean.”} *slowly moves under the table* Cuz he wrote both of them…
{“No, Clark, not this note. The note I got years ago. The first note he ever wrote to me.”} *sigh* I hear Tempestt (from Lois and Clark) in my head saying, “How DUMB *WAS* she?!”
{I could only watch as Clark removed his glasses and slipped them into the pocket of his suit jacket.} In my head, it was a very smooth move.
{You wore a flimsy, pale blue dress} And pink panties!
{And when we flew together, your fingers slipped away from mine at one point and you fell. I had to catch you.”} Too bad you couldn’t have taken her flying one last time…
{“When we did get a chance to talk, I tried to explain as much as I could to you. I held you and I kissed your hair.”} I know! I just read that the other day and it messed me all up to heck! And now you’ve got me going again!
{Whatever control I felt began to crumble.} You’re gonna fall apart and I’ll be right behind you…
{“This is – this is—” I searched my brain and came up short for any sort of description for what this meant.} Can’t find one can you?
{“And you think taking my memory away was fair?} Nothing about it was fair, though he should have given you a choice. Just like he should have after finding out about Jason. But once again, he made the decision for you. And you know what, he deserves to have his head bitten off.
Seeing him raise his voice is…beyond scary. He’s just pleading his case; I’d hate to see him severely ** off. *moves further under the table*
{“Well, don’t do me any more favors,” I bit out scathingly, “because your judgment calls are in serious need of reevaluation.”} *eyes go wide in speechless moment* The woman’s got a point. Look at the consequences of your choices. Everything’s all right now, but look at at what you put Jason through. Speaking of…
{“You looked your son in the eyes and told him to lie to me for you?”} Never thought I’d even *think* of calling Clark a bastard…
*squirms and covers eyes* I don’t wanna watch this anymore…
{“I saw everything – every recital, every birthday, every holiday.} Seeing isn’t the same as being.
{“Lois, I love you!”} *covers mouth* I wasn’t expecting him to say it like that, grasping on to whatever he could just to keep her in his life.
{So when I say stay away, I mean it. Stay. Away. From. Me.} Wow, and he has to hear it once again from someone he loves. Rather ironic. Just as soon as he’s got Jason back into his good graces, he loses Lois. At least she didn’t say something like she can’t believe she’d ever let him touch her…
{As I cried into my pillow that night, I thanked God that Richard was away, because I knew I wouldn’t have been able to explain to him the agony I felt.} Lucy would have some major ‘splainin to do that night. She still does actually…
{There was a word for people like me – hypocrite.} And then there’s that. Love makes you do some crazy things.
{I shouldn’t have had to blame myself for the decisions that he made for me.} You made do with what you had.
{I would never let myself fall under the power of those blue eyes again. I would avoid them – avoid him. It was the only way I could stop myself from going under again.} What about work? Are they both gonna use their vacation days and take time off work? Wait, Perry’s STILL ALIVE?! AND EDITOR?!
{As it was, the ball was now in my court to contact him and let him know what had happened last night.} Just don’t tell at him.
{Maybe he already knew. Maybe Clark had called him.} Maybe he had heard it all the way from his apartment…
{I knew that had Jason been told that I knew the truth, he would have called me immediately. No, Jason was totally unaware of what had happened last night on the roof of the Daily Planet.} So where’s Clark? Smallville? I suspect Superman’s gonna be out of commission for a long time…
{I should have known better than to call newlyweds at this hour of the morning. But what I needed to say couldn’t wait. It had waited long enough.} *worried* What’s she gonna say?
{“Hi, Jason. It’s Mom.”} It’s over?! I wanted to see what she was gonna say!! *has a hissy fit*
I don’t know what you were so worried about. Personally, I have to take an emotional break from fanfic. You have totally done me in this week and I don’t think my heart can take anymore. You did a great job; having a twenty year history makes a whole lot of difference in your story and…whew. Yeah. I’ll see you when I get back. |
 queequeg1013 2007-09-24 . chapter 1Alphie, you are so gifted. Your story is perfect in every sense of the word. This has got to be one of the best if not the best written reveal stories out there. And I love how you told the story through Lois's eyes. We rode the wave of emotions along with Lois through your brilliant storytelling.
And poor Clark. He really needs a hug. I feel his pain. He had made the toughest decision of his life for the one he loved, only to have that same person, the person he sacrified everything for, react this way. It's heartbreaking. |
 Eviefan 2007-09-24 . chapter 1YAY, I was so glad to see you had posted this and it was better than I could have though. Yes it was sad and hard to read but I was so ready for Lois to know the truth and now she does. I like the way you had her thinking at first when Clark was trying to get time in to talk to her, how she thought of the wedding dance and that he might have feelings for her.
A part of me felt bad for Clark when she kept avoiding him, and I liked that he had to leave her thought note, though I must admit that I was not expecting him to turn around and still be Clark Kent, Lois's reaction to that was dead one what I thought it would be.
Ouch she was mad at him, but she had a right to be, and I thought back to the time Jason told Clark he never wanted to see him again. Poor Clark, well maybe not poor, but he just wants to prtect those people that he loves and just messes it all up. I felt bad when she slammed the door and heard the sob as she left. I also felt for her when she was crying into her pillow.
Now what will happen when she talks to Jason, hopefully he can help her calme down some..This was great work, and I'll be waiting for more.. |
 htbthomas 2007-09-24 . chapter 1Aw, look! Everyone loves it! ♥ You had no need to worry at all. You were able to make this your own and fit perfectly into your universe. :)
It's so painful to watch Lois ignore Clark for so long, and then see how horribly their talk went. If Clark hadn't waited so long... but I'm really glad that Jason persuaded him to do it. It needed to be done.
I'm looking forward to BJW Age 22 Part 2 now. I want to know what Jason and Lois are going to say to each other! |
 xyvortex 2007-09-24 . chapter 1great chapter, I can't wait to see what Jason has to say to her, either in this or in the main story. IMHO, Richard probably already knows. I think he probably made the same leap that Jason did, probably not too long after he found out about Jason if not before. |
 What a troubled life 2007-09-24 . chapter 1That was awesome! I will have to go back and read the other Superman story you wrote, not to mention the Harry Potter fanfics and the Twilight fanfic. You are amazing! I wish I could write this good!! |
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