Ahh, I thought this was amazing! Awesome work! :)

very nice. great job!!i like the way you work it.

Well hell. This is definitely one of my favorite pieces now. I liked the story's structure; it's certainly not done in the traditional style, and I like it that way with very little regard to sentence length and "proper" grammar, because with a piece like this, that's how it's *supposed* to be done. Everything important is emphasized, and the words are constantly flowing, portraying constant physical movement and Leon's thoughts. Loved it loved it loved it!

Wow. Just... wow. Dream-like, distant... I like it.
-Wd

Holy wow. I *love* the intensity in this, and the way you've phrased everything. It's so disjointed, but it works so well and I love it. Yeah. Wow. XD

Wow. That was...intense. Your way with pacing made this fic. The long sentences suited the rushed, confused, anxious feeling that surrounded this fic and I struggled to keep up. But that's a good thing. The haphazard sentences and the way they cut off brilliantly mimics the fast pace and the lack of thinking that Leon has the time to do. Also, the repitition just made everything that much more...amazing...(I really need to read a dictionary ¬_¬ I suck at words).

Brilliant use of formatting too, I read it like it was intended and it made it that much more mind-blowing.

I'm still amazed by your talent and bathe in the Leon-ness *drool* :P