Hurry up and update please!

I like this story - although I think that you're being too mean to 'Warp. He isn't just a spoiled sparkling, you know. Not all the things that go wrong has to be his fault. And Starscream's almost too mary-sueish.

Shouldn't Stealth and Nebula be concerned about 'Warp after he was injured too? Instead, most of their concern is centered on Screamer.

Haha anyway its a good story and I look forward to reading more. :)

YO! YOU! YEAH, YOU! WITH THE GRUMPY OLD AWESOME SEXY JET! UPDATE!

*crys* TE-CE! WARP! SCREAMER! TT-TT

damit, zat! *shakefist*

I'll come up with a worthy comment. Maybe. Possibly. I don't know. I think my logic circuts got fried by awesome-sauce. SPICY! I want moar.

FINISHED FINALLY. Okay once again great chapter. I like how you've REALLY established Starscream's little breakdowns right now. He seems to always have been susceptible to emotional moments, but this is really his first berserker moment. You mentioned at the bottom in a little A/N that you were worried about pinning their reactions correctly or it being corny. I think it's perfect, and you may have edited it since feeling that way, but it flows beautifully just like the rest of the story. At this point, you've built up the characters so well that they have probably developed lives of their own, and rather than you guiding them through situations, they are guiding you! Hah!

Okay here are my final comments. I mentioned that chapter thirteen is my absolute favorite, and that's because (as I touched upon already), it really did a great job of relieving the angst from the story. It acted as a great distraction for Starscream, but just as myself and most readers probably feared, a distraction isn't enough to foster true healing. You've done a great job showing in general the way these characters work so far. It's becoming so much more easy to see them as they are in the present. I can only imagine that after this, the seed of fear and distrust has been planted in Skywarp and Thundercracker. Now they may begin to see one another as the 'best friends' and Starscream as the 'other friend,' even if it's completely subconscious. As though to push that point, they now share the ties of true family with one another, both having a living parent, and, you know, those parents are gettin' pretty cozy with one another to boot. This, even more so, separates Starscream from them, although probably more so in his own eyes. They are the sparklings, and he is the 'adopted one'. Anyway, I'm not even sure if that would really be the case, but I always had an easier time seeing Thundercracker and Skywarp as having the closest bond of the three. BUT MOVING ON. I think you are rather insidious for writing such a heartfelt and beautiful background for these three characters, knowing that they are going to turn out the way they do. It's sort of depressing. But I still love it and feel like I can appreciate it all the more, because it gives them exactly what EVERYONE has: an innocent childhood. All children are born innocent, it's not like they are just 'evil' or something. It's incredibly hard to write them in the present and keep them in character, but to write a story that actually shows them developing from innocent little kids into the cruel Decepticon Seekers we all know and love (to hate)... man I can't express the respect I have for you right now. It is nuts. N-V-T-S nuts! Serious! Okay well I think I'm done with my review for now. Note the "For now," cuz I seriously might come back and add another when I think of more to say. Frickin'.. love this story.

I think this is my favorite chapter so far. It has taken this story from a light-hearted coming-of-age story turned serious to an adventure jailbreak! The parallelism between the adults taking a slightly more mature but still devious route to achieve the same as the two younglings is awesome. This is my favorite chapter so far! Favorite times a million! I love it 100%!

I don't think I've ever routed for someone committing a slow and painful murder. It's sort of disturbing to feel that way, but at the same time, I feel as though this is a fitting end for him, more so than a trial and jail time. He brought this upon himself. I can't help but find myself a little disgusted with Starscream's mother as well. I hate to say that, especially since she's just met her end, but seriously... :( Those last words are so, so hurtful, even if she never intended them to be that way. She basically told him to leave, to run away. It's insulting and depressing and.. ugh. Nevermind the fact that she facilitated the whole situation by letting it go on the way she did. Man, this story is so true to life, I can't even express just how much it truly is, but that makes it so much more touching to read. It's a lesson, really, without having to live through the painful consequences to boot.

This chapter made me laugh so hard. What a beautiful depiction of these three lovable little brats getting what they've been working so hard for. I love the start with Skywarp being SO convinced that someone was having a sparkling. He didn't know who, but he knew it was SOMEONE. xDD So good. I also loved how you explained all of their colors. I'll never be able to look at these three again without going "AAW" at their colors, chosen in honor of their tight-knit friendship. Sigh. So beautiful.

Hahahahaha oh man! You can really see where Skywarp gets his attitude. Stealthshadow is at his best here! He's such a ridiculously good father (against all odds? LOLO) and his witty remarks are second to none. Daggummit I also love the, erm, tension between him and Nebula. xD It's so awesome, but not overdone at all, to make you feel like she's the typical snarky femme who bests the guys just 'cuz. *lame look at a massive portion of female OCs, and even many canon femmes*

;-; times a million. It's so beautiful that Starscream wishes to help his mother. And it's so wretched and pathetic that his father is even willing to use her against him. It's fear that often drives abusive people in such a way. The more their subjects 'rebel,' the more desperate and vile they become. I also loved the beginning of the chapter. It really showed such a great contrast between Skywarp's family and Starscream's. Stealthshadow is abrasive, but not cruel. He's a positive influence, and a really fraggin' badaft one if I do say so myself. Fraggin'.. 1.9. LOL he's so awesome. Love him!

Thundercracker and Skywarp both reacting to Starscream's situation was touching and painful. This story is really a gorgeous lesson, and especially this chapter. You're brilliant, DC, and I truly mean that. Children so often catch onto things that parents sometimes don't even realize they are aware of. And they have a hard time dealing with them. Both Thundercracker and Skywarp know that something is wrong, but they have no way to really understand it for what it is, and thus don't know what to do about it. Man this is so sad I can't even stand it. Like I'm so happy that Starscream now has his friends, and especially that he's finally found two healthy role models to look to for guidance, but it's excruciatingly heartbreaking to see him suffer the way he is.. and the way so many real children do. ;-;

LOL THE TRAINING SCENE AT THE END IS ONE OF THE FUNNIEST THINGS I HAVE EVER READ IN MY LIFE. I sat here cracking up the entire way through. The dialog is brilliant, LOL! xD So good. Hahahahahaha er-hem, sorry! Anyway, earlier in the chapter, Starscream's ingenious design was really a breathtaking thing to behold. How fitting that he of all would be such a genius even in his youth, but feel (and actually be) so under-appreciated. It explains so much, so well. MAN YOU ARE A GENIUS.

So I think I'm in love with Stealthshadow.

;-; Starscream. I think what makes this chapter so incredibly emotional is how painfully realistic it is. Starscream's mother is the exact image of so many mothers in the same situation. It's so sad, but unfortunately very real. The war stories at the beginning of the chapter really do a great job to act as a prelude to the terror Starscream is experiencing in his present. I also love, LOVE the way Starscream looks to TC's mother as a role model and imitates her behavior. You truly have an incredible grasp on human behavior.

LOL Skywarp's dad is so awesome. I can't even stand it! You have like the best characters I have ever read. I love the way this story is so lighthearted and cute, but maintains some very dark undertones just like things tend to happen in real life. They're really coming to light in this chapter, but you were generous enough (and a quality writer xD) to allude to them right from the start, so readers knew what would eventually come.

OMG. THUNDERCRACKER HAS A TOTAL MILF. I mean, okay, bad choice of words. I love her. I LOVE her. She's so sweet and funny, and an AERIAL WARRIOR HOW COOL IS THAT WOWOWOWOW so cool I can't even stand it ee I love you!! I love how Skywarp warps away when she comes in LOL how ignoble of him xDD

HHRN THIS IS SO BEAUTIFUL. The ending, where they are all shoving... SO CUTE. Man, the way TC floors them both even though he was always the quiet one. And once they got to know him, he really opened up. MAN I LOVE IT SO HARD THEY ARE ALL SO ADORABLE AND LOVABLE AND AND AND AH!!

These three are such.. KIDS! You really show your strength in displaying character traits and depicting them beautifully. I can imagine all of this so well in my mind as though it's completely natural!