Wow. Wow. and Wow. What an amazingly suspenseful horror story. Excellent use of the brothers' relationship and value they place on one another, even at their own expense. I love how you are slightly vague about what their hunter is; it adds marvelous tension, and the last few sentences are a delightful twist. Incredible work, you had me hooked from word one.

There's nothing that I love more than a good horror story and the Winchester boys camping *lol*

Loving this story - thanks!

O MY GOD ! IM FLIPPING OUT! I AM SOOOO HAPPY SAM HAS HIS HANDS LIKE MORE HAPPY THEN HEARING HIM DEAD ! IM THINKING "oo yes he has hands!...o wait hes dead? well hes got hands!" lol

HOW COULD YOU RIP OFF SAMS HAND! NOO! I HATE YOUU! YOU SUCK! :'( O NO!

"The silence dropped on the forest like a blanket." perfect description, i can really hear it go so silent like that just one second noise then nothing, like someones hit stop on the forests mp3 track. :( scary ! its very scary!

but its the shit on fire!

Holy shit ! im scared i really am! its so well written you should like write books. When Sam was dragged off and like poised and Dean just knew he had to clean it out, that whole part was so well written it just felt like a book not a fiction and that's WHAT SEPARATES witters form just fanfinction witters. I felt sick when dean was cleaning out the wound and the conversation he had with Sam after fantastic ! im re reading that part right now!

Wow! *-* Amazing story DD

I loved everything! The end was just so great

Congratulations for that See you next one o/

Kisses

Rosetta

Ciao!

A premise. The first of your stories I read is "In Darkness Let Me Dwell" (I pick out from the Fangtastic Slayer's favorite). Great, I like, very very much! So I start to read all yours stories (my custom: pick a author, read all the stories...).

This... This is really fabulous! Amazing, intense, make me a little anxious... That's what I search!

"Screaming For Vengeance" remember me a bit "Predator", the movie with Schwarzy... But your evil "it" is more, more, more evil!

...And the Epilogue... I should worry about "it"?

Thanks for the gorgeous story!

Now I'm carry on with your fictions.

Don't promise to review again... But I read alls!

Thanks!

Ciao from Milano, Italy!

Cristina

P.S. forgive my English, I'm still learning...

You know, I've gone and read a few of your other works (still making my way through) and while they have a consistent quality to them and are good reads so far, it's made me come back to this story and look more favorably upon it than I did in my earlier review. Those issues I had I still do have but the intensity of this story is on another level compared to other Supernatural fanfics. You do hurt!Dean and hurt!Sam (I can't believe I'm using those terms) very well separately in later stories but when you put them together like you do in this story, it's like double the thrill-ride aspect and it really does turn into a nail-biting page-turner in the latter portions.

I just thought in the original review I didn't really capture that element of your story which I think is its major strength.

I think you've captured that side of Dean that worries about Sam (but tries not to show it) really well - his internal monologuing contrasting what he actually says to Sam feels accurate to the character. At the same time though, I felt that Dean's trademark kind of brash humor and rougher side doesn't come through as well in the first few chapters in this story and I feel like that's a big part of the character which makes this Dean feel a little incomplete (in the rest of the story it's less important since his concern for Sam starts to take over the bulk of his thoughts). Your version of Sam works for me but without that contrast, I sometimes felt like Dean wasn't a different enough voice from his brother in the dialogue. Also, the idea of ending each chapter with a Dean realization is an interesting concept to give the story a creepy flourish but not one that I think works too successfully in the early chapters because each one of his realizations is an obvious one that's really a non-revelation and feels too much like a stylistic manipulation for the sake of the form than a true evolution in Dean's thoughts.

All that said, I got gradually drawn into the story more and more as it barrelled along and it had a uniquely contemplative but disturbing mood that worked well with the creepy forest setting. I also didn't expect it to be able to capture my interest for the duration due to the entire story being essentially a simple survival/cat-and-mouse tale but it did and I found myself invested thoroughly by story's end. I think you write well and you mostly have a good handle on story logic and development (though I found the resolution/climax slightly confusing to read). Still, that's not a small compliment as easily two-thirds of the stories I attempt to read on here have not just minor but major problems in at least one of those areas (writing style, story logic, or pacing). Despite any issues I may have had with the characterization/dialogue, this story got my attention and kept it. I'm very interested in reading the rest of your work especially considering this is one of your early pieces.

I'll start off by saying that I love your "Supernatural" stories - wonderfully constructed plotlines, written with a lot of insight and skill. Your Sam and Dean may be the most in-character Sam and Dean I've read in fandom in the face of serious life-threatening adversity.

However, I do have a few minor gripes.

Coming to this story itself, my major problem was with the dialogue. Most of it came off as stilted and did not, to me, flow very well. And quite an unnecessary excess of "Sam/Dean smiled." Almost all of their conversations - however grave the situation - are excessively punctuated by all the "smiling" and it gets grating after some time. The problems with the dialogue rob quite a bit of raw emotion from the story.

Also almost all the chapters (all except the eighth, I think) end with Dean contemplating on the adversary, finishing with a dramatic statement. That... gets grating too, after a bit, though I suspect it just might be me.

The story can use a bit of cleaning up for multiple punctuation errors.

Again - I'm sorry for going on and on about it - but I wish that large parts of the story - especially parts with a lot of dialogue - had more... *feeling.* I really wasn't able to grasp the extent of the boys' panic and horror in what was definitely a terrifying situation.

Aside from all that, a brilliant tale. The horror worked out well, and a wonderfully interesting antagonist. Kudos to your creativity.

Take care, and Keep Writing!

*gasps* Does that mean there's gonna be a sequel, or did you just want to end it in a scary way? This story was freakin awesome! I am so sending the link to this to all my friends. ;D

Oh god, this fic is freakin me out big time! *shivers* So freakin creepy!...*sobs* God, I still have chills running through me..Sam's hand! *lets out breath* I'm afraid to go the next chapter. ;P

Wow, uh..so it's 4 in the morning here and dark, and I am freaking out over this story! The way you write it is really making it creepy. The "And it still didn't come" up the "It was coming" and GOD, I've got chills! You should totally write your own horror novels! ;D

Aw (sighs with relief) our boys made it :D - there was never a doubt in mind (looks around nervously) - loved that Sammy bought Dean a plush squirrel ROFL XD - and he made a full recovery WOO HOO :D - but the evil fugly is still out there, what an evil note to finish on LOL, that's why I love you ROFL :D

Hugs and luv

A totally exhausted Mish :D