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| Lone Silver Angel 2008-08-30 ch 5,  | abuseEh... Somehow... I felt that Sai behaved more like Sasuke then himself... You know, when Sai walked in on Hinata in the bathroom, I thought he was Sasuke using Sai's name for god-knows-what reason... Maybe he's kinda OOC? Please update soon! |
| oreostar90 2008-08-09 ch 5, | abuseaww, this is so cute! Poor Hinata though, this can't be good for her heart. |
| oreostar90 2008-08-09 ch 1, | abuselol, it's so cute. I love the crossdressing type of story, like HanaKimi. |
| DerangedCalling 2008-08-09 ch 5, | abuseVery cute so far :) I adore Hinata pairings |
| SHeWithNoName 2008-07-21 ch 5, | abusecool story |
| blackraven615 2008-06-24 ch 5, | abuseKakashi's a perv. But you all know that now, don't you. That was a funny chapter. It took me forever to review, sorry 'bout that. The chapter was really funny. Hope you update soon. |
| Joycie32 2008-06-21 ch 5, | abuseCan't wait for the next chapter!!:D |
| lightxdark 2008-06-16 ch 5, | abuse^_^ Awesomeness.Good luck on the next chapter yo. |
| Kiba's Little Worry 2008-05-26 ch 5, | abuseSweet! |
| realityfling18 2008-05-26 ch 1, | abuseheyy! i just found this story and love it already! definatley continue please! :D |
| Kaimei-San 2008-05-25 ch 5, | abuseuwa! Aa update I love it! ( I can't wait to see what's next!) ^-^ |
| Brianna 2008-05-24 ch 1, anon. | abuseit was awsome dude! |
| thexamimi 2008-05-24 ch 4, | abusePlease. Just please. Stop using the abused Japanese words. I mean, this whole fic is written in English, right? Please keep the words in English. It's more professional to keep it that way. Like if you put 'Watashi no Haruno Sakura desu' in this fic, it would totally throw some people off. I mean, who cares if you know all the Japanese words? It's extremely frustrating to read it if you need to put a translation of it in the end. It's alright, though, to keep 'hai', 'sumimasen', or 'gomenasai' for extremely brief phrases. It's also accepted to use Japanese suffixes like '-chan', '-kun', but nothing too uncommon, please. I'll compliment your grammar skills. They are exceptional. =) And I also want to thank you for not making Hinata like a twelve year old nor too OOC. Biggest pet peeve of all time in a fic. Some characters are a big out of character, like Sai, but I can understand that, since in canon, the only reason why he was so emotionless was because he was taught to be that way. Although, I don't expect him to have that much emotions either. This fic is going fairly well. It's pleasing to know that the relationship will go slow. Love is slow process. =) I enjoyed it. |
| HinataMorningstar 2008-05-24 ch 5, | abusek |
| SarahiNia 2008-05-23 ch 5, | abuseahah i loved it xpecially what will happen next when hinata gets drunk ...ahah |