Reviews for The Champion's

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Athenian Grace 2008-07-13 ch 12,	abusei'm sorry i found this fic so late but I'm happy i did! great job! i loved it.
xoxoBlackOwl 2008-07-07 ch 12,	abuseSo.. uhm. Basically... there's a lot of squealing. And such. And... yeah..
Vampiric Phantoms 2008-07-02 ch 12,	abuseOh, this was excellent! I loved it very much, all the detail and the plot. You kept to the story while still making it your own piece.
Bittersweet Alias 2008-06-15 ch 12,	abuseI loved this story. Thank you. There aren't many Harry/Cedric's and that is actually my OTP out of every pairing possible. =) Thank you again!
kbeto 2008-05-29 ch 12,	abuseWow! I must say i thought for one second, or more, that Cedric was dead. Again! Your final do make me believe that it'll be a afterwards. Seamus and Ron? Unexpected and funny! Great job!
kbeto 2008-05-29 ch 8,	abuseLoved the supportive Ron. Usually Hermione assumes that role. The part Ron tried to hit Cho on the head, LOL!
YuzukiHanako 2008-05-01 ch 9,	abusewhy did Harry get more points taken?
wolverinestarlight 2008-02-25 ch 11, anon.	abuseAw...that RonxSeamus at the end was just too cute! Good story! Keep it up!
vodoo-voldemort 2008-01-28 ch 12,	abusei love your story :) harry/cedric has to be one of my favourite pairings 9just without cedric dying >.
GrlWithoutAName 2008-01-19 ch 8,	abuseHermione stinks as of right now. You are suppose to keep you friend's secrets. How much of an idiot is she? I mean of course Harry didn't want the whole school to know he is gay.
awn 2008-01-08 ch 12,	abuseYes! Cedric didn't die. I was very worried when the angsty end came, but then, after rereading the last part, I understood that Cedric did indeed survive - me likes. I think you are confusing plural and genitive here. Plural is when there is many of one sorts, as many bits, tomatoes or countries. Genitive is when you won something, as my book, your story, his letter and Harry’s friends. When you have genitive, you DO put an apostrophe before the S. When there are plural you do NOT put an apostrophe there. See this example, where ‘Harry’s’ represents genitive and ‘books’ plural. (As Harry’s books.) Therefore you have a huge error in the title of the story – ‘The Champions’. Here, you mean something that belong to ‘The Champion’, as the ‘’s’ refers to the noun: Champion. I am no expert of English – it is my second language – but I have control over the apostrophes and there’s no problem in my English class says my teacher. If you want me to clarify the rules for you, check back to my profile and email me. (Note that I do NOT accept Private Messages on this site!) ‘ Snape on the other hand, wasn’t thrilled.’ – from Ch1 I think you should have written ‘was not’ here. Maybe you could have made the ‘not’ Italics or bold, just to show that Snape was definitely not thrilled. ‘/…/ it was huge, bigger than an ordinary spa pool /…/’ -from Ch1 How would Harry know how an ‘ordinary spa poll’ looked like? I doubt the Dursleys ever took him to a spa – they preferred him not to be too healthy … ‘Hermione and Ron shared angry glances before banding together again in an effort to cheer Harry up.’ – Ch2 Would ‘exchange angry glances’ suit better here? They do not exactly share the look, as we are not talking about the same look. Sure, they could share the look but it sounds strange. Regarding your question at the end of chapter five – I think it should have been Cho, so she will dump Cedric … But then she would probably spread ‘rumours’ (it would not be rumours but sometimes the truth is just as nasty – or worse. ‘I do not understand you Briteesh, all ze French are very open about zere relationships,’ she told them. ‘Maybe you should theenk about zat, and stop ‘iding behind trees.’ – Fleur, Ch6 Are you really sure French people are as accepting? Or did she mean that wizards in France are more accepting? ARGH! I don’t like Cho kissing Cedric at all … Why does he not dump her? I just read the end of Chapter six, by the way. Cedric was sitting in Professor Flitwick’s office /…/ finishing off his essay /…/ Cedric pushed the essay aside and pulled another piece of parchment out of his bag and began to write. And then there is a lot of things mentioned in the letter. But: Flitwick should be there and watch Cedric so he does what he is supposed to do during detention, right? And, is it not a bit risky for him to write about his boyfriend in Flitwick’s detention …? ‘Much more romantic then a series of words written on a crummy piece of parchment.’ Should it not be ‘than a series of words here’? I like Snape’s threat of pouring Veritaserum into Harry’s pumkin juice – and Harry’s fear of letting people know that Dobby gave him the Gillyweed and his secret love on Cedric (Cho in Goblet of Fire). It makes sense as this fanfic is a slightly rewritten version of Goblet of Fire, just that Harry and Cedric are in love (a much better choice, don’t you think?). Hermione was beginning to shake in anger, and she snapped her quill in half by accident. “Harry!” she yelled. “Don’t you think you should take into account other peoples feelings before you go and do something so reckless? Doesn’t it bother you that Cho could be very upset from what you are doing!?” I like it how Hermione yells at Harry and I quite agree – Harry should make Cedric dump Cho. Although Harry can’t help it … By the way: It should be ‘people’s’ here – you missed an apostrophe. It is very interesting that Hermione is the one that lets Harry down and not Ron. Although … Why did she get so upset in the first place. Maybe I will find out, but it was a wee bit unfair to punish Harry because Cedric has two relationships at the same time. And Cho calling Harry ‘f-gg-t’ … It’s interesting that Ron supports Harry and Hermione lets him down, it is usually different in slash fanfiction. ‘“Everlasting bogies!” Fred said excitedly. “And she’ll continuously babble non-stop for three days, it’s something Lady Pomfrey can’t cure.”’ – Ch9 I like the idea of Ron, Seamus, Fred and George poisoning Hermione as a punishment of her disapproval of Harry and Cedric being together, although I have to point out that Poppy Pomfrey is usually referred to as Madam Pomfrey. I also liked the idea of a special feast to celebrate acceptance (that Harry and Cedric are together) – does this have to do with Mrs Rowling’s outing of Dumbledore? – and all that. But this is something I react on: ‘Cedric’s dark hair flopped forward onto Harry’s face, tickling him softly.’ Is Cedric not blond? I liked Chapter eleven – and that Seamus asked Ron if he might kiss him. I am not into Ron/Seamus – actually, the thought never hit me – but I sort of shipped them in this fanfic. Am very thrilled to see what will happen in the final chapter. Although I found out it was … What happened really?
OccasusVenustas 2008-01-03 ch 12, anon.	abuseI do have an account, but feeling too lazy to log in on this computer :p sorry. Anyhow I wanted to leave you a constructive review so I decided to take my time and read through the entire fic. First I'd like to say this is the first multi-chaptered Cedric/Harry I've read. I've just completed a Harry/Cedric one-shot and wanted to see what was out there. I found yours delightfully well written. It's not often you find fic on here that doesn't make your brain cry with agony at the poor grammar and spelling. I thank you for that, deeply lol. Not much to nit-pick really. I guess the few peeves I have with it have to be that one, Harry and Cedric really act femme. I mean to a point where I wasn't really enjoying it. Of course that's a personal peeve of mine that I've developed, I used to greatly enjoy the femme aspect of slash but lately I've been of a mind to read men acting like men and Harry cries an awful lot in this fic. However, I don't want you to take that as a flame, as it's a personal opinion. I did miss the appearance of Moody, only because Goblet of Fire was the first book by JK I've ever read where she actually managed to take me by surprise with the Villan. The other books she was pretty obvious so I rather like Moody. But it didn't take anything away from your story not having him there. I also don't like Ron-slash in general but there wasn't much in there so I can't complain. And typically I'm a Hermione/Viktor girl but by the same token, I don't really like Hermione so I can't complain that you made her the villan either. All in all, well done. (now I must wait for my piece of crap wireless to connect so I can submit the review lol)
Angel Spirit 2007-12-13 ch 12,	abuseLOL, HP4-both the book AND the movie have gotten me into a Harry/Cedric fix-I'm shocked that there's not many fics on here featuring those two, but yours is one of the one's that I enjoyed reading all the way through! Nyahahaha, Ron and Seamus...I didn't see that one coming! Though I should've with some of the hints that you were giving off in the end...the howler that they sent Hermione was priceless...I give those two kudo's 100% of the way! ^-~v Harry and Cedric are so cute together, I don't know why I never saw it before, esp with all the cute moments that you had in this fic! ^-^
DMHPluv 2007-12-04 ch 12,	abusethis is story was awesome! but i wish u didn't end it so aburtly and u put some ron and seamus action in! i never realized what a cute couple they were until now! angain awesome story!
dreamgirl93 2007-11-20 ch 12,	abusegreat story!

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