There was a few mistakes, but overall it was well written.

Its soooooooooooooooooooooo saaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaad :(

But again, well written.

Great story. :) It literally had me in tears. I thought the ending was really good though, the "However one day the mausoleum could be gone, the urns inside forgotten. The two lovers would be forgotten. Their ashes mixed with the swirling golden sands of the desert, in the sands of forever lasting Time." Your a great writer.

Emma K.

100,0? Aw.That was my dream...But I like your story anyhoo.