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| Konoha's Kage 2008-08-04 ch 25,  | abuseThat happened to me too. I thought it was writer's block, turned out to be me subconsciously finding a whole buncha flaws and waiting for the rest of me to figure it out. ... Well, I still love your writing, so you better get some new stuff going soon... Please? |
| Jason 2008-06-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou don't provide enough back story in the beginning for people to know whats going on. You jump from one POV to another at the flip of the page. Also, Harry's attitude (example: him blaming Chaz for the troll incident) does not make any sense. |
| Morbious20 2008-05-03 ch 24, | abuseVery interesting story so far ^^, I've loved some parts and not been overly fond of others but all in all a great story so far. Keep it up and post again soon plz ^^. |
| luralily 2008-04-29 ch 6, | abuseI've only read 5 chapters so far, and something has started to bug be. Harry doesn't seem to care that he's in another dimension and that he's been separated from his family and friends. He's been stuck there for 8 months or so, shouldn't he be trying to find a way back? |
| horsinaround94 2008-04-09 ch 24, | abuseGood job! Can't wait for more! |
| padfootROX 2008-04-08 ch 23, | abuseOMG this is awesome, i love chaz, god harry's a git though i cant wait to find out what happens pleeaase do some more from chaz's POV update soon :D |
| horsinaround94 2008-04-03 ch 23, | abuseGood job! Can't wait for more! |
| stonegnome1 2008-04-03 ch 23, | abuseI am very fond of the multple perspectives one or possibly two corrections. No doubt, he would be the Durmstrang Champion, and I suddenly wished very much to be the Champion to go head to head with him. The very idea of going against the legendary Krum was positively creepy. I suggest that if Cedric is looking forward to it he would find it something more positive than creepy. also: So, I decided to falter his plans. Albus Dumbledore would not have two Champions, and his precious By-Who-Lived would not be in the Tournament. I suggest alter rather than faulter. |
| FrostyAKF 2008-03-23 ch 22, | abuseInteresting fic. Glad I picked it up. Can't wait to read more. ~Frosty |
| horsinaround94 2008-03-21 ch 22, | abuseGood job! Can't wait for more! |
| horsinaround94 2008-03-12 ch 20, | abuseGood job! Can't wait for more! |
| desiking75 2008-03-09 ch 1, | abuseGreat Prologue, a bit rocky because of the lack of Dialogue, but really good! I'm happy that this won't be a slow story (like so may others... We KNOW what happened the first year, we read the real book!) and I hope yo progress quickly. The POV switch might be a bit tricky, but if u can do it, go for it! Good Luck! |
| notBald 2008-03-07 ch 4, | abuseThe whole POV changing is really killing this story. It would have been better if you kept to Charlus POV all the time, even if some things would be left unexplained. Cheers |
| cutieme012 2008-03-07 ch 19, | abuseupdate! |
| corey 2008-03-06 ch 13, anon. | abuseok, your writng is very good but the plot and everything is horrible. Thats why your not getitng many reviews, you are making charles way topowerful, and you change pov to much. You realy need to redo the story and make charles the boy who lived and harry powerful. Those kinds of stories are always best. |