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DeltaSPARTAN003
2009-01-30 . chapter 1
continue!
DarkRaider08
2008-07-18 . chapter 7
The suspense is killing me, I like this story, hope you plan to update soon...
DarkRaider08
2008-07-18 . chapter 6
Nicely done there! a well writtend and a grea story so far, keep it up...
DarkRaider08
2008-07-18 . chapter 5
This story is getting better and better, a man or a digimon can make a difference
DarkRaider08
2008-07-18 . chapter 4
That was a superb well-written chapter and a funny one at that, how will Shinya and Ryouta get out of this one LOL!
DarkRaider08
2008-07-18 . chapter 3
Well that was a formidable action-packed chapter, can't wai to read more
DarkRaider08
2008-07-18 . chapter 2
Well I guess that's explains alot how Tortomon got there and man, talk about hating your colleague but killing them? anyway that was a marvelous and well written chapter.
DarkRaider08
2008-07-18 . chapter 1
That was pretty good if I do say so myself, it would have been a lot better if the describe how the Tortomon got there.
IluvMatt
2008-03-24 . chapter 7
OMG! FINALLY, a good Digimon story, plotline and characters! AWESOME!! :3 Keep writing this, coz it ROCKS!!
Dragon Shi
2008-03-01 . chapter 7
Kind of short, but I felt the chapter made the point about this new group coming in and the view that they are no different from Shinya and the gang. I am curious on what you are planning with Ryouta with his past memories coming up. Possible someone he knew in the past returning? Nice work as usual. :)
Dragon Shi
2008-03-01 . chapter 6
Been a while but I'm back. Sorry for the delay Night. Though this chapter didn't have as much character development as the last it was approached well to be sure. The new character Mika brings in something that could be another rivialry with Shinya since they both share the same type or romance? I also like how Shinya got so mad about his bike. Reminded me of Brooklyn from Gargoyles when his bike was trashed. However on one note I have to suggest that you need to not remind the reader when they are disgusted in their human form.

"Shinya eventually saw the lady off with a polite bow. The disguised Fladramon then came up to Ryouta, who had lit a cigarette." I felt there was no need to remind us he was in human form when you spoke about it eariler. This has happened before in chapters back, but it's being more frequant. All and all this chapter was still up to your usual high standards Night and look forward to reading chapter 7 which I'll be doing now. lol.
HeartlessNeoshadow
2008-02-24 . chapter 7
So, just like how there are Digimon who can turn into humans, there are now humans who can turn into Digimon. Well, I guess I shouldn't be too surprised. I mean, if one thing can happen, then I guess the opposite can too.

Seems to me like the interactions between Shinya and Yuri can get very amusing.

"Don't make me pull these three stripes on you soldier."

That line made me laugh a little. :)

Again, a very enjoyable chapter.
James6
2008-02-24 . chapter 7
I see the human-turned digimon have made their appearance.

The 6-year flashback caught me surprise a little. Maybe I have reading comprehension problems, but one moment I was reading the chase, the next Ryouta was eating after his shift. I probably need to pay more attention to detail like the big, black bold heading above it :p

Feel sorry for Shinya losing his bike. It would be a bitch to replace it, although I was a bit cofused by the 'pulling rank'. What would she pull rank on him for?

An interesting point came up at the bottom where it was clear the leader of the two humans was in fact a digimon. The seperatists using them for gain?

Can't wait for more.
mangagirl18
2008-02-22 . chapter 7
AWESOME, AWESOME, AWESOME chpter! Poor Eiji, will he ever learn? Lol. Anyways what a brilliant ending. Please update ASAP!
Frozen Twins
2008-02-21 . chapter 7
Not bad, not bad. A little dry as your story goes. Strikedramon's stuff didn't feel real enough, and because of that, the fake style really hurt your chapter. But that's a simple mistake. The bringing in of the bad guys style was not unepexcted (I must say I am surprised one of the D-Pred haven't been captured by now... considering the chances too).

It'll be interesting to see... as for cursing.. would you mean getting rid of that. You don't use it a lot, but you did use the A word.

Thanks
Frozen Twins
Betamon X
Gomamon X (IT SHALL COME OFF! OF THIS I PROMISE!)
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