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| Kyra-Mitsu 2008-08-03 ch 15,  | abuseX3, pretty gd ^_^, cant wait to see what happens the next chapter ^_^ |
| Kyra-Mitsu 2008-08-03 ch 7, | abuseAHA! i just started reading your story!! its pretty gd ^__^ and for the 10:10 thing.. ITS 10:10 MAKE A WISH! X3! |
| Lady Katelynna 2008-07-24 ch 13, | abuseYAY, another chapter! hehe Ino, my patience will only go so far! you have been WARNED hehe |
| Celina Cann 2008-07-02 ch 11, | abuseI love this story and paramore but I do have 1 request could u please unjoin the story paragraghs u see I have really bad eyesight and its sort of hard to find where I was. but its only a sagestion love this story |
| Lady Katelynna 2008-07-01 ch 11, | abuseOk, Ino-chan, time for some constructive criticism. I mean this out of love, ok? Your story is a little to dialogged based. You should try to describe the setting a litt more, ok? |
| Lady Katelynna 2008-06-03 ch 10, | abuselololol yet ANOTHER cameo by a teacher. GO ROUFF!! SHe would SO do that... once more, just watch how your sentences run into each other, k? |
| ItachiLover144 2008-05-19 ch 1, | abuseKeep writing!! |
| Lady Katelynna 2008-05-17 ch 9, | abuseok Ino-chan ,I FINALLY read it, and I have some constructive criticism, add some comma's?? seriously? It's hard to follow the sentences sometimes. *sends you a note now* |
| Lady Katelynna 2008-02-03 ch 6, | abuseINO-CHAN! That was GOD!!You did Shika SO good ^_^ |
| DarknessFlameWolf 2008-01-25 ch 6, | abuseI really enjoy you plotline, but your format is horrible for a story. Do not get me wrong, this is NOT a flame--merely advice. Your format is for poems and you're writing a story. This makes it extremely hard to read. I either skipped lines or reread the same line twenty times. Also, your should really edit and revise after you finish a chapter. Conventions, capitalization, and spelling is constantly missing and it gets confusing sometimes. Description is a major part of writing and you barely have any. Continuous dialogue gets boring and, eventually, the reader will get bored and lose interest. I'm not going to tell you that you suck--because you don't. You can't get worse at writing, only better. And you show great potential with you plotline and ideas, but you do need to work on the presentation for it. Once again, this is NOT a flame. Flamers are idiotic and mostly are crude writers themselves. I just want to read a good story in progress without getting confused on what's going on. |
| Randi Dog 2008-01-07 ch 4, | abuseHi! Awesome story, though i will never remember the names of your other people. i'm sorry. i am hopeless when it comes to names. i like horses. PIE. |
| .Saiya.of.the.moon. 2007-10-08 ch 3, | abusecool |
| '-MiKaTa-SaMa-' 2007-10-08 ch 3, | abuseawesome keep going! to short! please make longer chapters! ^^! |
| .Saiya.of.the.moon. 2007-09-30 ch 2, | abusethis is really good, plz update soon. I LOVE SHIKA... just a little |
| '-MiKaTa-SaMa-' 2007-09-30 ch 2, | abusei really liked it Ino! update soon! |