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Update Soon...This seems like it's going to be pretty good

that was really good hope u load soon

I love this story. Good job!

I'm so terribly sorry that I don't understand any of this McKenzie. Maybe I should actually read this series like I promised Virginia... but it was perdy good writing for something I couldn't understand.

Hey Kenzie!


Okay.. i know i told you i loved it, and so on. :P But i want to tell you again!

Haha... well; I LOVE IT!!

haha... thanks a million for putting me up there!! i fel so special! :D and im so waiting for ur next chapter! :D hope to hear more from you!

Oh, okay now i'm excited! Another Vampire going to forks! :D

Wont the Cullen family be happy. :P


I shall wait till you upload! But hurry! Cause i wanna see what happens..

But please take in mind, slow down and details. More details on movement, scenes and people. And dont jump through everything so quickly. :)

good story!!

Once again- a bit too rushed.

And Kelly's dad was a bit, too straight with her i think.

If your daughter had just been turned into something like that, it would be very difficult to explain to her. And even more so as to tell her to leave. I think he was a bit to, direct to her.

But once more, overall.. it was good!

The plot was good. Though i found it a bit rushed. You kind of jumped through three stages in only a little bit. There could have been way more detail in her thoughts, the scene and the things happening.

Apart from all that- sorry if im flaming, i think its started off really good! And i will be nice and go read the next chapter. :)

= O she's been turned into a vampire
this story is awesome. continue writing it PLEASE

Hey, Kenzie-poo, it's your favorite cousin EVER! HAHAHAHA jk
Now, I've never read Twilight (Lord knows I'm obsessed with enough as it is), but I read this, and it was pretty good! Your sentences are kinda long, and you should use commas every now and then, but other than that, it was good! Just keep updating; people will review soon! I promise. And if anybody is reading this, you'd better be reviewing! Seriously!
Anyway, I love you more than a hundred orange Sourpatch Kids!
LovexInfinity,
Megan