You know... I'm no good at constructive review... really, I'm not.

Six o'clock? That was about the time I came back home today - not that it has anything to do with your story since it wasn't because of a dark-haired bishie - rather a bottle of green liquor.

Can I ask you something? How DARE you? PLanting into my brain such an image of Dash! Now my nose is bleeding so much I could fill a bathtub with it!

Despite what you say, I quite like this chapter. Your writing is quite different from what I'm used to but I don't mean it in a bad way - at all. I really like it because it's... well, you can picture it precisely. I know that for some people it sounds heavy but that's just fine - perhaps should you go easy with the description, it'd be lighter. Though here, I think it goes well with the story - and no one ever complained about Mephy's language, right? Poetic, that is.
I feel really sorry for Dashwood... And like Ruth, I can't fathom just how can he laugh after all he underwent so far. This is just insane.
And his lines (Dash's) are just so like him! No, really!

OOC? Well, I think that everyting or so in a fanfiction is OOC since what we write never occured in our 'source material', so to speak. I am but a slave and thus, my place sure enough doesn't allow me to discuss Master's decisions.

Georik smiled? At Dash? That is totally OOC! *is flailing like crazy* This won't do!

BUT, I absolutely loved Georik's line when he asks Mephy if he enjoyed the show... Right now, I have the silliest grin ever plastered on my face and I can't possibly wipe it off.

"his busy fingers that obeyed Bruno’s every twisted whim"... Yaoi material! No, honestly, when talking about Bruno, this sounds just so... naughty. And no, I'm not imagining things.

The lines from Dante... remind me so much of when Georik stumbles on Dash in Hell... *is crying*

Unky Sandwich wants me? So what? I want a demon sandwich! And I won't be nice to him should he cross my path... His attitude in Hell was just... awesome! But I don't like him. Duh.^^

Remember some crazy palmtree from Youtube? Good... I swear, I was not stalking you...
I fell on Animamundi like misery on the poor world... say, three days ago. And I was despaired to see so few fictions with them... You saved my day!

So, in order to write something constructive... I have to say that even if I were to look for the tiniest OOCiness, I would be sorely disappointed.^^ I mean, this is so Dashwood-like. Though I am desperate to know more about him - damn me and this skip button that never works when I need it too!

Sorry, back to the topic: Apparently, you haven't finished it yet... Take your time please - I can wait years to read a good story and I love your writing. (I already loved your vid so... let's say I'm a huge fan of yours. I might even call you Master - and I already apologize for I don't have dear Dashwood's bishiness. Sorry about this)

I dunny, there is something about your writing that I like very much. I mean, there are stories that you read and others that you can live. Yours is from the latter category. I mean, your descriptions are so accurate that I could as well have been in the study too... *is drooling in the librairy* Ack! *wipes keyboard*

I'm so sorry, it's not a constructed revierw. I feel so ashamed, really.)

Just so you know that I find them absolutely perfect, that you officially turned me into an Animamundi addict. And honestly, it was worth the wait. Sometimes, it's good to make people read longer stories and use their brain rather than feeding their lust rightaway. *evil smirk*

I hope to hear from you soon and I wish to apologize for the overly long comment but, please, forgive me. Master?^^

I wish you all the best - and live angst, dark bishies and BL! Bishiness will prevail!^^

Tristana

ps: Is that normal that I picture Mephistopheles telling a fed up Georik that 'he can change'? *shudders* Scary.

*gives loads of Swiss chocolate* Can I pay you in chocolate? *bribing mode on* *hugs*

Ah, a DashwoodxGeorik fic. *clasps hands together gleefully* This is very well-written with florid language, tying in all sorts of details from the game and staying true to the characters' personalities. The consoling pat on the shoulder in the second chapter amused me greatly, and I liked how the tension built up over the course of the chapters. I must beseech you to update. It's not often that I am so lucky to come upon such a pleasant read and with my favorite pairing no less.

Man, as soon as I read your note on dA I was here faster than light! I didn't have a chance to leave a comment when I read your update but of course I came back when I could!

Hah, first of all...hell yeah...loved it! Worth the wait if you don't mind me saying so n_n I was a little concerned for Georik since, if I remember correctly, Dash has rather long fingernails, but all was well ;D I really hope Georik returns the favour...that would be mucho awesome...Dash deserves some, er, non-rape.

I find writing sex scenes incredibly difficult and, as such, have written very little...but you write it well, especially in the context of Animamundi's dark theme, so I'm looking forward to more!

My only prob with anything in your fic is personal in that I just don't like one particular word in smut scenes ;P It probably doesn't bother anyone but me, but whenever I see "globes" to describe butt cheeks or boobs I just think of lightbulbs and shoe brands...heh heh heh. But like I said, it's a personal thing and I wasn't distracted from the awesomeness that is your writing by it n_n

I suppose I could have left you a two-word comment of "FREAKIN' BRILLIANT" and left it at that, but I was rather excited about the poke you gave me on dA and the New Chapter bot email that ffdotnet so wonderfully delivers...and had to tell you how goddamn happy I was that you had updated :D Again, loved it.

Sanshain ;D

XD nesecite un traductor pero el fic es buenisimo XD

Oh brilliant! As someone else mentioned, the fandom for Animamundi is sadly and surprisingly small...as in non-existent. But your writing is fantastic, far from boring I might add. It really feels like the game; the atmosphere and characterisation is spot on. Hopefully you will continue this!! I like your style, mainly showing in Dashwood's thoughts and actions...though perhaps I'm incredibly biased since he remains my favourite character. Hah, I might try to contribute to the fandom...maybe after I attempt to complete all the endings...it's quite a long game!

Thanks for the read! I read the five chapters twice through, just to revel in the fact that the only Animamundi fanfiction I found was awesomely well written!!

i happened to stumble upon this fic while searching FF for animamundi fictions and i just have to say,its an excellent tribute to a sadly small fandom,i hope to see the next chapter sometime n_n

Augh! What a place to leave off. Please write more soon, your style is excellent, and everyone is spot-on.

I have to say, I like this story. It sounds like something straight out of them game - I would totally believe it if this were the next chapter I stumbled upon. Your Dashwood is spot-on (he's one of my favourite characters, so it makes me really happy to see him portrayed that accurately).

Just a few things on grammar and such - firstly, commas go "inside the quotation marks," like this, not "outside", like that. Secondly, when multiple people are talking, a separate paragraph is needed each time the speaker changes if the words spoken are in quotation marks. For example, it's not:


Georik said, "blah blah blah." Dashwood responded, "blah blah."


It is:


Georik said, "Blah blah blah."

Dashwood responded, "Blah blah."


Fixing that would also help spread out the text - it's rather blocky as is, which makes it a bit hard to read.

Aside from that, I don't really have complaints. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

Ah! I love love love this! I need more!! Why isn't there more! XO ((XD))

What do you mean boring?? This story is amazing!! I realize you must have written it a while ago but I only just started to play Animamundi and your writing style reminds me so much of how the actual story is written! Except... better! I love it! And there's going to be smut? I mean... WOW! XD *quickly goes to read next chapter*

hehehe that was great update soon plzz

aah, Dashwood, I love him

Sorry for the long wait on a review.What's the propostion? I need to know what's going to happen. So intrigued. Can't wait for the lemon !

and no shouting we need your voice to make these stories I love so much...wait that doesn't sound right, it should be hands.:d anyway please update soon...

I wouldn't say its a boring start, i quite liked it actually, not much going on, but it was written well enough to keep attention. I'm glad to see some animamundi, I really hope to see what you do with this story!