Giving constructive criticism with flame...

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Go get a beta reader or something. THIS IS AN ABSOLUTE MESS.

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Oh, so you can rambles PreciousAll's story and it's grammar, huh? Huh?

Or maybe you don't remember because you're rambling and flaming too much instead of giving constructive criticism? HUH? Here's another example

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This is an incoherent mess

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Wow...saying someone's work like that? Oh...YOU'RE TOO MUCH!

If you want to criticize, don't use sharp words like that! You're hurting too many people! Just look at those forums that argue to you! Do you think you're good and so mighty so you can give a concrit with flame? WHAT THE FUCK IS THAT SHIT?

this is shit.

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So his pikachu evolved even thoegh it had hesatation in a few episodes like the evee one and I think when he got his electric badge. I guess in the changing world he finally felt the need to evolve or is that one a different pokemon. Sorry I am being nitpicky I really liked this FF. Its a cool concept.

man That was intreating.

this has to be one of the most boring bit's of work you have done and that is saying something, even shadow/phantomness cardcaptors ashura was more fun to read.

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very interesting. you have a very creative imagination.

That was interesting explanation. This story felt a lot less meaningless than other stories of yours.

That's really interesting and definetly unique. Maybe Pikachu just changed its mind and decided to evolve. Ash does strike me as the kind of idiot who would go down in history.

About how long after Ash is this? I suspect he's dead since it has been at least two or three generations, but that may just be Pokemon generations.

Okay...I'm not sure if I got it, but OK...KEEP WRITING!

When did Ash evolve Pikachu? And what is this drug that Giovanni's scientists created? Can you write more stories like this? They're REALLY interesting, and put Pokemon in a whole new light.

That's an interesting future view.

You threw in that last bit just to bash Ash, and I can't image Ash EVER eveloving pikachu (if you think he'd ever FORCE a pokemon to evelove, well then, you don't have a clue about his character)

Yea, Team Rocket does often like to play god with pokemon.

Ehh? I don't think I understand all of it..::cocks head to the side::..::reads it again..light bulb:: Oh, I get it now! Giovanni was being stupid and arrogant. The evolution system evolved for a reason, and he didn't even stop to consider that. And now he's living with the consequences: A powerful, intelligent predator who is now the evolutionary peak of the planet, much like humans were. I like this story, it's very well thought out and logical. The Gyarados kept the Magikarp species alive my making many Magikarp eggs, and the Magikarp kept the Gyarados in check for being weak enough as that many would be killed before they could evolve into that super-powerful form. I like this alot! (I think that you would enjoy my fiction, The Strength in Weakness; it's about why the Gyarados can be so strong if the Magikarp is so weak. Yes, that was a shameless plug for the story). Well, I loves it muchly and once favorites is back up again, I'm going to put this story on it! Hee hee! _

After reading this, I am now compleatly confused.