Aww, cute, acurate, and in-character. The only criticism I can give is that you should proofread it.

There are so few manga based stories and even FEWER excellent manga based stories.

I really should have reviewed this ages ago. I've read it a couple of times, but I always get tongue tied when it comes to filling out the review.

I've added this to my favorites.

Aaw... I read a fanfiction similar to this, yet not at all like it... It was about Jean feeling useless... Except it was because he was raped, see? And the guy that raped him really wanted Mustang... and he called jean a **- poor substitute... It made me cry... this one did too... I guess I'm too soft...

Yay! Coolio story! I like it very much, yes, yes! Too bad it's a oneshot (or is it? Dun dun dun dun) anyhow, keep up the good work!