Okay, so it took me awhile to get around to reviewing, but at least I finally did.

Anyway, not a bad chapter for being filler mostly. It's not easy to fill space and make it interesting, really about the only thing you can do is stick in character development, that's about how I get through the filler without being too boring.

I did notice however you were getting really heavy on dialogue. Not a bad thing, but there were some very large sections of just dialogue and nothing saying what the characters were doing or feeling. Even a little bit of reactions and such is helpful even if they are truly just standing around talking.

Anyway, off to read 15 now.

Hurgh. It still hurts to see it. My opinion on it hasn't changed, I love it.

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;_;

Finally caught up. Sorry for a lack in reviews.

Great chapter for just a filler. Your description is getting better, you can tell as you go through the chapters - and the length is increasing, which as always good. Evil Ion is so...evil. And scary. You're doing a great job with him.

Keep it up, Squidy!

Good to see you've finally updated. Good chapter, even if it was filler. Needs more Guy though. I hope you update soon.

Oh, yeah, great chapter, even if it was filler. Your narrative has really improved and was a pleasure to read.

...You know, I don't know your opinion on this as the author, but I'm on Luke's side. Maybe it's because I've had situations like that, but I want to burst in there to tell Luke someone's on his side. And I know things are going to get worse for him before they get better, but man... I feel for him.

You spend a bit more time than you need on transitions within the chapter ('He did this, then this, then went here', etc), and you're not keeping it to the minimum. It's not super horrible, but could use some work.

I enjoy your characterization. I almost want to say that they're overstated, but... I think they work too much to be overstated. Good job.

Can't wait to see the next chapter!

My, my, I do love your story so very much. Although, I am saddened by the absence of Tear, since I could definitely see the Jade/Tear hints you sprinkled into the story. I have much love for that pairing and at first I thought that was what you were going for, but then you put in the Luke/Tear (not so much love for that pairing) and now I'm not quite sure what you're going to do.

But that's what I like in a story, since most of the time plotlines are so predictable. But yours is keeping me guessing, which is a hard thing to do, so thank you very much. I'm looking forward to another update, and to more Jade/Tear, since I know you're a shipper of the two.

But, I didn't stalk your bio page, or anything like that. No, of course not. Why would I do that? *Runs away*

Poor Asch getting caught like that, though it should make things interesting. Bet they won't appreciate Cantabile joining them too.

And again, much love to Guy being on Van's side, and Evil Ion is great :)

And yeah, finally got around to reviewing. You're as bad as I am about posting new chapters at horrible times (mean, posting right before I go to work!)

Yay! I'm really tired, so I'm putting enthusiasm into this!

I laughed so much at Jade slapping Luke, but their little moments are so good and nice that I have to smile. (Enthusiasm!)

MadEvilMean!Ion really freaks me out, so so much. Good job on him. (Enthusiasm!)

See you next chapter - enthusiasmz!

Much love to Ion's twistedness. I also loved Jade's comment to Luke about "he could have done better" that was awesome.

Man, I thought Mieu's little blabber mouth was annoying when he was on the good side, but I guess they knew anyways. I'm curious to see what you plan to do with Asch~ good chapter ^^

I was about to protest the unfairness of me not remembering a chapter 12 when I remember the issue Arka brought up. :)

So... I have to go find the one that I didn't review way back when... But you would be all 'Bleh' if it was pre-NaNo.

Hmm... Small formatting thingie FF . net does is the italics thing... You've probably noticed already (ah ha!) but it likes to get rid of the spaces right before the italicized word. So just in case you didn't notice for yours... It happens.

There, finally all caught up~ you've definitely improved quite a bit, it was fun to watch.

I'm ready to strangle Luke... in this horrid world where I can't shut him up with the magical X button XD

~ I look forward to seeing what Asch has in mind.

Okay ~ it won't let me review the choral castle chapter since it thanks I already did ^^' so I'll say so here:

now that makes much more sense!

~okay for this chapter:

My only one big issue - is Guy. He seems like he was converted far to easily, and his seemingly undying trust in Ion seems far too unfounded for him to go to the lengths he's gone. Since it's an issue from how the situation was set up ~ I'll stop mentioning it every time Guy shows up ^^'

This chapter was really much better than your last ones and you can see the improvement. Your pacing has gotten much much better and you draw the scenes out much better than before.

YAY! Asch!! (sorry - had to)

Asch! How could you do such a thing?! T.T

So where's this thing that is going to have Asch fans so upset? I didn't notice anything of the sort at all!

Really, the last scene was fine, it wasn't completely out there for Asch to mess around with Luke at that point, just a bit weird after he was nice, but who knows, he loves to mess around with Luke at this point, that could be it.

And yeah, Natalia sure is annoying as always, poor girl, she always is made out to be such a snobby brat.

~You're getting much better, a very nice improvement over your first few chapters.

I like your characterization of Cantabile, and I really do look forward to what you plan to do with her. She seems sneaky and I don't think she's as loyal as one would believe. I wasn't fond of Duke Fabre's characterization, he seemed too fatherly towards Luke in the way he called him son and scolded him about being a good member of the family. But he's pretty minor~ so its not such a big deal.

Ion finally shows a glimpse of his true colours~ well done. Your plot is building~ and the pacing was nice. You stopped to give us some character development and description which was really nice ~ keep it up