lol Your 4 year old Pan is great. I couldn't help but remember her skipping up to fight in the World Tournament. Broly doesn't stand a chance against the cuteness that is little Pan.

It's good, and I like where it is heading. Hope to see more soon!

Haha, done well!

Make more chapters God dammit the story is going good as hell make more please

Good, just what i like to read,
some typo's need to be addressed, "...Grandpa Goku...fight with before i was born" should be "fought with" and its nice to see some shakedown in the plot too with your perculiar Naruto humour.

Keep going and i'll review.

Good luck with the other stories.

Thank you for the kind review Knight 25, angel of strife 2007. and as for YOU CraZy Blue MonKey, I KNOW I'M EVIL! BWAHAHAHAHA! Also Will Kaisen, I like your recomendations most of the time, but I don't think Broly would stop for a memory of Peragus... In fact that would probably make him angrier. Peragus used a mind control device on Broly, was willing so sacrifice him completely for revenge, and tried to use him to control the universe. Peragus was NOT the worlds best dad.

Good chapter. Please continue.

curse u evil person for combinding three chapters in one oh and the story is good but u are just evil.

Okay, I got it! Please update very soon!

oh, my Lord! That was terrifying! I thought that Pan was almost done for...that was really good!

A gentle side to Broly! I LOVE it!

I agree with you that they make Broly out to be too much of a pyshco and I really love this story!

Okay,

Just read your revised chapter 1.

I'm glad you acted on my suggestions (however, you still missed geese) but thank you.

some new idea's in the plot, one example is new language in the text or my personal suggestion, circumstancial flashback's, similar to your 'Broly: Second Coming' reference however, different because it happens realtime, "Bro..ly..please..stop" to Broly reminds him of Paragas "Broly, stop it son, STOP!!" and cuts through his temporary insanity and could be used as a calming point because his father was another solid figure in his life.

Just an idea for when you continue this story (if you decide to).

Still, Keep it coming.

Will Kaisen.

your new story sounds pretty cool

Further suggestions?

Good story. please continue.

not bad cant wait to read more. this is a first never read or watched naruto so maybe this will be a change