haha
love it

can do you do me favor and tell me the name of the episoed when cause i cant find out with one it is ?

Very nice.

Aw! This is so great! I loved it. You did such a wonderful job with Raven's 'thoughts/narration'. Loved the wording. Keep up the excellent work.

bbissocute

Wicked awesome! I hope you continue it, or is it just going to be a one shot? Either way, very good!
^_^IMOWF

realli cute. though you got your tenses mixed up a bit.

oh, i liked it!
the third person p.o.v. was really cute, cause it couldve been ruined if it was dirst person...whatever...very cute!

I loved it! Just watch for leaving out tiny words. Please keep writing! Nice and original!
-PRMS

it's very good- but it could be better.

at one point you left out 'why' in your sentence. in another instance (i think it was the same sentence) you used 'quite' instead of 'quiet'. little things like 'clock' instead of 'cloak'. these are relatively small things and they're annoying as hell as i've had to deal with them too. and it sucks to read your own stuff 'til you feel like crying and hating your own stuff, but them's the breaks.

still, very nice. and i am truly sorry if this was offensive in any way, but i'm nitpicker. trust me, i'm way worse on myself...

and they still show up!! argh!