Reviews for Fire the Nomad

Twilight Kunoichi
2008-02-03
ch 1,

abusehm... interesting, you should expand more on this character!

Reinao Tanaka
2007-10-29
ch 1,

abuseDon't hate me. I was actually one of your phantom hits before I got an account. After you reviewed my story, I went to your profile to check out your stories and I was thinking, you know, this seems awfully familiar. Then I recalled why. So I am finally taking the initiative to review. ^_^
Let's see...I love the way you describe Fire by likening her to her element. It really gave me a good picture of her personality. The only problem that really struck me was this sentence: "Slowly riding the waves in to a tiny inlet some ways down from the ugly, metal behemoth with the soldiers, Fire kept a close eye on the forces making them slippery way on the ice and snow." Its a little convoluted and confusing. I had to reread it a couple times before I understood what you meant...but that might be because I read too quickly for my own good. And of course there is your use of "them" rather than "their."
Have you pondered maybe continuing this story, or maybe making it a two-shot? I'd like to know if Fire ever finds a home. So if inspiration strikes, I'll gladly read and review any continuation!

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