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Reviews For: Desert Bus Ride 1: A Romance Story and for Ladies - Reviews: Page 1 of 3
Melnivone 2008-12-29 . chapter 1
You have nearly convinced me to buy that game.
Nadesiko04 2008-12-28 . chapter 1
Sir, I want to bear your children.
Radio Interference 2008-12-13 . chapter 1
ALL BECAUSE TERRORISTS
Steve of Shoreside 2008-12-08 . chapter 1
And then Mr Oakland was a zombie.
Witchkid42 2008-12-08 . chapter 1
You, good sir, are the greatest writer humanity has ever seen.
Captain Hammer 2008-11-23 . chapter 1
That was... wow. Mr. Chimaera, you have a new fan.
stayscrunchyinmilk 2008-10-31 . chapter 1
Literary genius. It's like he's forcing us to think hard about what he's writing, so we can imagine the story as we're reading about it. It's like motzart, but in writing.

This is my favorite bit:

When they arrive, boyfriend was got shot.
"He am hit by bullets!" Margaret thought very loudly.
"This is all because terrorists!" Mr. Oakland punched fist into air with angry. He was angry.

Genius. I wonder if the author is trying to portray the cycle of life in his story - The innocence at the beginning, the giving of life with the birth approaching the pinnacle of the storyline, and the death at the end.

It's not a romance story and for ladies. It's a precious gift to all of us. I will name my first son or daughter Peter Chimera in tribute to this great piece of work.
earmuffs of discovery 2008-09-17 . chapter 1
The earmuffs were made of scientific discovery.
The earmuffs were made of scientific discovery.
The earmuffs were made of scientific discovery.
The earmuffs were made of scientific discovery.
The earmuffs were made of scientific discovery.
The earmuffs were made of scientific discovery.



Scares children
wants ur book 2008-09-17 . chapter 1
i wanna buy ur book but im afriad ur joking about the book too youll just take my $ and run
which makes me sad
because i;d love to carry these master peice storys around...
i hope the storys in the book are writin like yor fanfictions are
tervor bagey 2008-08-21 . chapter 1
your story is good and am i liknig them. thye mkae me lauhged and lauhgde and laughdefgs. u shud ** to my howse nad sleepnig w\ my dog.
J. Stalvern 2008-08-16 . chapter 1
The radio said "No Mr. Oakland, you are hit by bullets"
and then Mr. Oakland was a zombie.
Catherina Trovinsky 2008-08-13 . chapter 1
I must admit, when I first chose to read this story, I was skeptical about the content. Normally I do not enjoy romances, however this skillfully woven tale has changed my views. I was drawn in the moment I started to read. The symbolism of the earmuffs, perhaps a denial of the woman's presence in the desert of motherhood, was profound. The sudden shock of nearly taking the life of an innocent skunk had me gripping the edge of my chair.

When Bob Orlando fell, I could feel the worry of the bus riders through your words. I know I breathed a sigh of relief when the wound sustained from his accident proved to be very minor. I could feel Bob's hopes rising as he spoke to Margaret, only to come crashing down as she revealed she had a boyfriend, only to discover the horrible tragedy that had befallen him.

The shock Margaret must have felt when she learned from her boyfriend, who revealed with his last breath that he was her cousin, was crushing. And the sorrow Bob felt as he returned to Tuscan all the more tragic, as it was avoidable had he stayed by Margaret's side. The burden he bore truly moved me. I was in tears by the end of this beautiful tragedy, one that makes Romeo and Juliet look like the work of a three year-old. Bravo, my friend, bravo!
chocomimi 2008-08-13 . chapter 1
I'm scared with earmuffs.
XHEX 2008-08-04 . chapter 1
6 Reasons Why For I Want Sex With You:

1. Bob putted his hand on the blood and it stop so it was only small blood.

2. It was hot so she holding dress carefully in case of hot exhausting.

3. Bob was sad that she had girlfriend but knew he would win her triumphantly to like him and maybe get a very good cup of coffee.

4. "My boyfriend is work for FBI and they have dangerous terroristm"
"That is outrageous," Bob demanded. "I hope he is safe" "Thank you for concerning you"

5. Stressed he almost drove off the line but he pressed left and did not. "It was a close one," he said but no one understand and did not know so he did not bother with them.

6. Boyfriend say "I am Jim and I am your cousin, Kyle"

Marry me. I won't cheat on you.
Anon 2008-07-17 . chapter 1
Tears stream down my face, having read this masterpiece. Gripping, suspenseful, beautiful; this story encompasses the tragedy brought on by the sudden, unexpected death of a loved one - and almost hitting a skunk.
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