waste of space.

This is a masterpiece.

hey u need to learn how to write and the proper use of grammer man.

hah.

Gad that sucked!! Wtf dude? The FbI is not like that at all!1! It had no story or anything! Aslo you totally spelled like half the words wrong. It also totally had no story or plot and the characters all sucked. I don't think Desert Bus is even a thing, you just made it up so you could post your crappy story on FanFiction dot net. You must be even dumber than George Dubya Bush.

Hahahahaha...lol, that is so pro, keep up the good work :P

You. Are. Amazing.

IT'S ACTION TIME!

"He am hit by bullets!"

You. Are. Fanfiction. God.

You have nearly convinced me to buy that game.

Sir, I want to bear your children.

ALL BECAUSE TERRORISTS

And then Mr Oakland was a zombie.

You, good sir, are the greatest writer humanity has ever seen.

That was... wow. Mr. Chimaera, you have a new fan.

Literary genius. It's like he's forcing us to think hard about what he's writing, so we can imagine the story as we're reading about it. It's like motzart, but in writing.

This is my favorite bit:

When they arrive, boyfriend was got shot.
"He am hit by bullets!" Margaret thought very loudly.
"This is all because terrorists!" Mr. Oakland punched fist into air with angry. He was angry.

Genius. I wonder if the author is trying to portray the cycle of life in his story - The innocence at the beginning, the giving of life with the birth approaching the pinnacle of the storyline, and the death at the end.

It's not a romance story and for ladies. It's a precious gift to all of us. I will name my first son or daughter Peter Chimera in tribute to this great piece of work.