This was a good story until this chapter. Did you intentionally turn it into a crap story? I mean what you did in this chapter just vomits all over the good parts you wrote previously.

That's a very good story. Please update another chapter!

Hm ... it needs some more fleshing out. It is way too fast pased and if you added detail it would slow down. Also, so of the characters reactions are not believable. They would be more believable if you did some more character development with them and fleshed it out more.

sad that ginny died but i cant wait for more. its really good.