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| Mystic Dragon 2008-09-05 ch 17,  | abuseWow. That was an incredible story! It was hard to tear myself away from it! The characterization would obviously be a little OOC since it was AU, but you captured it close to the original characters, anyway. Very well done! There were just a couple things that I noticed: The first was that some words were misspelled, or substituted with the wrong word (in one of the chapters, you had "sam" instead of "soon"). Either a beta-reader or just re-reading the story and correcting those little errors can easily fix that. Spellcheck doesn't catch everything, after all. ^_~ The second, which bugged me a bit more, was the ending. It felt like it didn't quite do the story justice. That it was too short in wrapping up everything that happened. I think that's really the only troublesome thing about the fic. Otherwise, it was excellent. Though, at least you did finish...good, finished stories are hard to find, so I'm glad this one does have a conclusion to it. Great story...definitely a favorite! Keep on writing! ^__^ |
| Whilemina J. Farnsworth III 2008-08-12 ch 1, | abuseOoh, I like this story! :D The concept is really neat, and I like how you get into Ed's state of mind. I'm just wondering if Ed still has automail or not. Great work, I can't wait to read more! |
| Yugisrose 2008-07-24 ch 17, | abuseWow, that was great! but is the way that the homunculi can come back as humans, the way you put it, true? Or is that something you made up? I know how different the manga is to the anime, so I just wanted to be sure. :) |
| Yugisrose 2008-07-24 ch 2, | abusereally awesome! |
| CheshireCatGrin3421 2008-07-17 ch 17, | abusethat ...was so awesome that i cant fully describe it, but! i will say this - u have a way of writing a story that seems euphoric and addictive :) i never lost interest :D which is hard for me :) hehehehe |
| XX-XDKuroNeko-ChanXD-XX 2008-07-02 ch 17, | abusei dont get it...is ed dead or what? good story by the way though, im just a little confuzzled. |
| Ining-Batong 2008-06-08 ch 16, | abuse... |
| Ining-Batong 2008-06-08 ch 15, | abuseoh crap oh crap oh crap oh crap! |
| Ining-Batong 2008-06-07 ch 13, | abuseARGH! DONT TELL ME AL IS AS STUBBORN AS ED! |
| Ining-Batong 2008-06-07 ch 12, | abuse...oh i hope Roy's plan works! |
| Ining-Batong 2008-06-06 ch 8, | abusehahahahahahahehehehehehehehehe |
| Ining-Batong 2008-06-06 ch 7, | abuseYAY! Ed finally punched Roy |
| Ining-Batong 2008-06-06 ch 6, | abuse...OH MI GOSH DAT IS SOO CUTE! ED CALED RO DAD! |
| Ining-Batong 2008-06-06 ch 2, | abuseaww poor Edward...i wanna hug him and for some reason beat him up...huh |
| Haleybird 2008-05-05 ch 17, | abuseI just want to thank you for writing this fanfic. One of the most well-written I've ever read, and the one that made me cry ^^ I actually cried. Incredibily well-written. Thank you. |