I can't bileve you killed sakura and naruto and hinata is a bad couple

um question. Why is garra on a mission? He's the kazekage. He doesnt go on missions. I like it though. Even though im a NaruHina fan.

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This story is very creative but I didn't understand the plot all that well. Call me and let me know what this is about. If it's "x-rated," tell me in french.

Yays! Send me a pm when it's posted, please!

YAY! I know that sounds really evil, but I hate Sakura... I mean REALLY hate her, and I'm not really that sad she died. *evil grin* Okay fine, I'm not sad at all xP

Can I say...WTH with this story from start to end?

Why is this story in Naruto & Sakura category filter when this comes out to NaruHIna? Kinda move this story from this category, you will be flamed, pmed and what not. DOes not matter if NAruto & Sakura were in the story. The NaruSaku only want to see the pairing happen. Not so half done story where you killed Sakura who's in love with Naruto and vice-versa Also, Hinata, so shy it is not even funny and all the sudden comes out after Sakura happens to die? You one of those writers who do this just for bloody kicks or something?

This is truly poorly written story and the category that should be chosen is All & All, not a specific one like Naruto & Sakura.

Later.

You... Killed... SAKURA? F-ing A!

Will this be NaruSaku in the end?

This is an average par story. It has potential to be good it's just the lack of certain things. Like description, in chapter 3 you had Tsunade explain the mission, then Team 7 complete the mission, and then meet up with Garra. You did all of that in about 300 words. Also you need to fix the sentence structure. If you don't know what I mean I'll show you.

Example of incorrect sentence structure:

“So now, the mission.” Kakashi smiled at his group. “Tsunade-sama told me the details. It’s B-rank, escort, the special Beauty-pageant is coming up, and the princess of the land of snow is coming here for it. “Princess Fuun?”

Example of correct sentence structure:

“So now, the mission.” Kakashi smiled at his group.

“Tsunade-sama told me the details. It’s B-rank, escort, the special Beauty-pageant is coming up, and the princess of the land of snow is coming here for it."

“Princess Fuun?” Naruto asked.

When you put things in the way you did, the paragraphs become hard to read. Plus it makes you're story look longer. Other than that it's just a bunch of little things, but hey it's your fic not mine so whatever.

Well I hope my advice helps, and don't get me wrong I like your story it's the grammar that's not that great. Hope you update soon.

"Shikyo-Shouki, Out!"

really good story so far. and please keep it narusaku.

Gaara digs Sakura? Oh crap!

Good stuff! I wanna see more!

Good story.