Reviews for Bratfest at: Tiffany's

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Mabelle Lemieux 2008-05-09 ch 17, anon.	abusethis is ahmazing! please continue it.
xoitsme848ox 2008-04-05 ch 17,	abuseomg plz write more!
Lilyi 2008-03-28 ch 9, anon.	abuseCh. 7-Great Halloween part-Didn't really get it? The beginning was pretty good. I haven't read any chapters over 7 yet. But I'm looking forward to them!! xoxox lily
pinkstripes387 2008-02-29 ch 17,	abuser u gonna update yet? u haven't since Thanksgiving. that was like a year ago! update soon my love xoxo, piglover149 AN: my username isn't because i love to eat pigs and r really fat, it's 'cause pigs r my favorite animal. they're so cute!
person 2008-01-03 ch 17, anon.	abusethis "book" is so FAKE! this would never happen! the girls don't even talk like the "REAL" girls. they don't say yo! and bratfest at tiffany's is probably about massie dating chris abeley and still likes Derrington. And about Claire and Cam..and if they ever get back together!
Casa Bonita Rocks My Socks 2007-12-11 ch 5,	abuseI have to say: I love the irony when you said you love flames yet the flame you got was deleted. Moving on to the actual crit: Author's notes are not called OOC. OOC is a term meaning Out of Character. Author's Notes are written like this: A/N. In the first sentence you switch from past tense to present tense. Pick one or other and stick with it. Better yet, get a beta and fix your story because you have grammar issues. I'm noticing comma abuse, a lack of semi-colons and some sentences just don't make sense whatsoever. I also notice that you use ly adverbs a lot. They are fine in moderation but there are other ways to get your point across. Ex: Massie walked gracefully. Rewritten: Massie walked with the careful, graceful steps of dancer. or: Massie walked towards third period, her steps quick and graceful. I noticed that you have also mixed up the three "theirs" To clarify: Their is a possessive; it used like this: Ex: Their brand new SUV was black. There is used to describe place or where someone has placed an object. Ex: I put the flyers there. They're is a contraction of the words they and are. Ex: They're really annoying. And as a final note, don't use French in your fics unless you use it in context and it makes sense for whatever story you are writing. I know that Lisi sprinkles in a French word once and in a while, but to be honest, it just looks stupid here. And it's not needed. If you're writing a story about Les Miserables, it makes sense. Here, not so much. -Casa
iheart Meghan 2007-11-22 ch 17,	abuseno offense, but the massie vs. alicia thing isnt the best and its bothering me. but that's just my opinion. maybe consider some changes. other than that, keep up the good work!!
littleitalygrl2 2007-11-22 ch 17,	abusei dont know, i just really dont like the whole alicia v. massie thing.. its bothering me.. you know you love me, i
bimbufeyi1 2007-11-21 ch 4,	abusegd gd story. u got d plot
Careyy 2007-11-19 ch 16, anon.	abuseis dylan really adopted? wow. need to edit chpt. 14 its underlined like the whole thing basicaly. It's exceletn, but make it more longer =] cant wiatt
littleitalygrl2 2007-11-18 ch 15,	abuseits good! i love how massie and alicia are fighting!! defiantly use spell check and i am comfused, is it SOPTlight points or STARlights points?? i saw both in the story so... i also love that dylan is adopted!! you know you love me, i
BurntVelvet 2007-11-16 ch 14,	abuseEHMAGAWD!
Wingzz 2007-11-16 ch 14,	abuseUh-oh spagettios! I haven't reviewed at all - sorry. But I've been reading this story and it's pretty cool. The whole C&D thing is strange, but I like strange thingers. One question tho, why are your author's notes called OOC? Update soon --WingsOfBetrayal
SeeminglyAngelic 2007-11-09 ch 13,	abuseYou should have Massie and the girls go out to eat, but make it coincidentally the same place Derrington is taking Claire out. Catch them in a kiss so there can be no excuses. >:} = twisted smirk
TinsleyCarmichael 2007-11-08 ch 5,	abusei liked your story until i read this chapter. WTF was up with the br's? That does no make your writing better.

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