Wow. Quite possibly the best one so far. You've really done a superb job of tapping into the emotions and thoughts of the characters in all of these chapters, something I'm sure you know all too well I've tried to accomplish myself.

Jaffar... a blank slate? An orphan? The very embodiment of Death itself? It's hard to place exactly what he is, but at least he has Nino to make him more human. I could really feel the emotions in this chapter, and it always brings me joy to see Jaffar and Nino together.

"My heart beating a rapid tattoo in my chest" and once again, excellent writing. Seeing as how you don't have a 'complete' tag for this fic, I will happily look forward to reading any future chapters you choose to add to this very insightful fic.

(and in case you were wondering, I was reading through some of the reviews I got for Consequences last night, and I couldn't help but notice your name. I figured it would be worth it to read something of yours, and I'm very pleased with what I've found so far.)

Cheers!

aw... u.u Poor Heath! *Sigh* of all her possible suitors, I think Priscilla belongs with Heath more than anyone else. Yet at the same time, there's such a deep social divide between them! I never really thought of it like that though, Heath being a man on the run. If he were to be with Priscilla, he would be giving her all the pain in his life. Ah... I'm just rambling at this point. But still, you made me realize a thing or two to be sure.

The hour is late. I must be off for bed. I'll read the 4th chapter and review it tomorrow. Really enjoying your fic!

Children of the sky... an interesting way of putting it. Even though I write so much with her, I still often forget this one true aspect about Fiora: her virtue, her duty. And how many people had to go through what she went through, seeing everyone in her unit die, and then live on knowing that she was part of what killed them. Painful...

I'm enjoying these chapters very much. They may be short, but they are certainly not lacking in substance!

M... lovely.

Kent truly is so much more complex than many think he is. He's a soldier through and through, but it's clear that somewhere deep, DEEP under his armor, there's a beating heart of a man who really does have emotions and feelings. And your fic (or at least the first chapter) portrays these aspects beautifully. Bravo.

Nit-pick: Near the end... "Without her EVER truly knowing"

I love HeathxPriscilla, this made my tear up.
It was very well done, -adds to favourite ten billion times-

This review is for the Jaffar piece.
Damn... I mean, Damn. That was right up my ally. I don't know what it is about the dark characters finding redemption (especially at the hand of a woman) but I totally have a weakness for them. Sounds like something I'd come up with. Not knowing anything about the actual characters, I was surprised how clearly I could imagine them without having much description to go on. You did a wonderful job of describing Jaffar's remorselessness but wavering at Nino's light. It had a great impact for how short it was. Makes me want to go out and learn more about the characters.
My one main nitpick is that the focus narrows a bit too much in the middle. I like the part about him being disturbed by nightmares, but I think the focus on that one particular dream broke the flow too much. The rest of the piece is very broad and moves quickly building up for the final scene at the end, but that focus on the dreams detracts a bit from the ending. I think you could have given the same details without calling attention to any particular moment. I guess all I'm trying to say is I didn't like the phrase "There was one dram in particular." It took away from the recurring aspect of that which haunted him.
But besides that I was really impressed. I really liked the images and the feelings conveyed. I was on the edge of my seat wondering if he would actually kill her or not until the very end. It was great how he couldn't look her in the eyes. And how even when he heard the order you could see him waver. I really like the "Why did she not see this night would come?" bit and I especially liked "For when I was bound to darkness, She was the light that set me free." Good line. Really good line.
You know my weakness for dark characters, so I'm probably biased, but this is one of my favorite stories you've done. Well done.

Ooh, a very interesting style you are using here, a mix of conventional story telling and poetry.
Ah, such wonders! Though I have yet to completely play through Rekka no Ken, and only know about half of the characters you cover in the chapters you have, I can't help but understand certain aspects of every one of them!
Anyways, very good job, keep up the wonderfullness that you have created!

Actually, uh, I'd like to say that I'm really sorry for not noticing this sooner, and when I did, I was like "o.o" since these are actually really good, and I do like the style. My favorite so far is the Jaffar one X3 I didn't find any errors, but who knows since I read a little fast..

I read something of other things you've written as well, and I'd like to say keep going! because you write very nicely.

This one was really nice. You know I don't like Rath, but you know, I had to read this (because you wrote it, so I knew it'd be good). I almost felt sorry for him, actually, when he felt regret. But honestly, my favorite line might have been: [As I rode into the village, I said my farewell.] I mean, that's amazing. I'm assuming you meant that that point in time is where he said goodbye to Lyn, because he knew he would not ever have her and should forget her (though obviously he liked her). He became a stronger character in that line, in my opinion, for having the courage and the strength to let her go completely.

[But she needed a man who could match her passion, whose fire rivaled her own.] Haha, this is a nice line. Out of all the men in Fire Emblem, it's really interesting to see these words. You know, Eliwood's gentle and kind/compassionate, and Hector's loud and brash and out there, and Kent's got a temper but he's also controlled, and Rath is...well, quiet and calm and composed, possibly even mellow.

So that's interesting to me, because you KNOW it's not talking about Eliwood. Hahaha. (Ninian's so much better for him than Lyndis is, anyway.)

Anyhow, this was nice. Really. And first person POV for the win, eh? I think so. You wrote something that almost made me like Rath, so I think you get a cookie or something... haha.

Cheers,
-Manna

PS. Write more! Write more!

You're quite the talented poet. Each of their hearts shine true with your words. Quite masterful!

Cool! This one is just as touching as all the rest! I love your style. Though I think this one was a bit long, and the length reduced the effect a bit. Well, that's all. Good job!

Normally I'm not too big a fan of prose, but your writing is excellent. I found myself completely absorbed with how you portrayed Jaffar's emotions throughout that scene. I can see how it would be challenging to write, like you mentioned, but you should be proud that you really, really pulled it off.

Absolutely moving and wonderful in every way, great job!

P.S. Any chance at a Canas chapter? ;)

whee. another nice poem. though i'm a bit picky abouit character name spellings. one FF spelled Jaffar as Jafar and i almost ran out of my breath trying to convince the author to change it. (luckily this FF is not on
so um, same mistake here. Matthew is spelled with 2 "t"s.
apart from that, everything about this poem fits well into Jaffar. and Nino.
sorry about my pickiness:P

Hello Kit! I was so happy to see a new piece of work for this collection of yours.

And Jaffar! So that's great. I find myself just a little fond of him, myself. Anyway, I have to say that my favorite two parts of this little piece were where Leila was mentioned (the woman whose last words speak Matthew's name), and when he looks at Nino, and he sees her eyes (that were already forgiving him). Wow, that was some powerful imagery, there.

And to be honest, I didn't think it deviated too much from the game. A little bit, yes...but not so much that it really detracts from the point of the 'fic.

(Anyway, I usually don't have much to say about short pieces of writing like this...but I try to come up with stuff to say so that my review sounds substantial! Lol.)

Oh, and the ending...! Perfect. A little cheesy, sure... but hey, who cares? I know I don't. And in all honesty, it's a "correct" ending, because if it hadn't been for Nino, Jaffar would never have become anything else, I don't think. (But maybe I'm the only one who feels that way.)

Also...did I email you back yet? I can't remember...

Cheers,
-Manna

Best story yet, but I kinda liked it more without the heavy structuring. The first version had a very "normal" every-day kinda feeling to it. I think some of that was lost in the structure. This version has a more poetic and epic feeling, but part of what I liked about the first version is that you got a sense that it was the kinda scene that went on every day. It wasn't too overdone though. My favorite scene is still where she has her eyes closed on the back of the wyvren.