This really made me smile. Equal parts silly and sad at first, then "hawt" as you put it, it was awesome. Loved it.

Very well done.

For a 1x2, there sure is a lot of 4...Ah well, it's all good. ^^

I generally no longer give reviews, but I felt this needed it:


- You used far TOO MANY clichés (and redundantly at that).

- Informal writing can be good, but yours was more like a kid talking too fast to fully make sense or develop a cohesive structure.

- Use spell check next time.


I don’t know if your tone and voice are a result of the way you characterize the narrator, or if it is a result of you being very young. In either case, it read very juvenile. If I were you, I’d stick to writing what I know. By all means, don’t stop writing – that’s the worst thing anyone can do. But reflect a little within yourself, find your story, and tell it through your characters.

Good Luck,
Maxwell-Yuy

yay, so cute. liked it lots.

Cheers,
Shan

Gotta love that ending. My favorite line was: "For some reason, when he's with me, he could be much more interesting than a new species of an igneous rock". ROTL!!

That was really good. Well Done!

LOL
I laughed and smiled. Super cute, super, super, super cute.

very nicely done.