Okay, this story, is awesome. No doubt about it.
Helped me get through a whole day without sleep along with another one. So thankyou! :)
I especially enjoyed the end, it just tickled me.
Anyway.. I'm off to go check out the sequel, so you'll probably hear from me soon.

One word wow!
This is my 3th time reading this story and i was just as glued to it as the first time i read it! you are an amazing writer! keep it up!!

who bring on evanders heir II dark mind:D

thanks for sharing:)

leanne
;)

AH! More..more..please hurry up!

Loved it!!

Thank you so much for writing this wonderful story. I found I couldn't stop reading it until I finished, no small feat because it was a big as some novels I've read recently (and more engaging :)

I loved the interactions between John and his new 'people', and I especially loved that Jack was there. I rarely find fiction with both these great characters interacting, and I wish there was more of it. Jack is a great mentor for John, even in 'Rising' I could see how well the worked together and how much they could learn from each other. You brought that out well in this story.

I felt like I was reading the beginning to some epic sci fi novel and loved ever bit of the plot you set up. I have of course read the second follow on story you have started as well, and I'm keen to follow this series where ever you take it. I hope your muses play well and inspire you to continue.

Very interesting story, though I've yet to figure out where Evander comes into it.

I'm assuming you're talking about Evander from Kathrine Kerr's novels, since your mentions of him thus far sound exactly like Evander.

A very enjoyable story. Loved the refernces to LOtR and Star wars.

Hi

Just read your story in one sitting - it was excellent, good pace, interesting plot, in character dialogue. I especially liked the whole Shep is even more special than we realised angle . very nicely done. I felt at times that you were alluding to a special closeness between Shep and Teyla - any plans to expand on that? Within the context of your story it would make sense - she being the leader of her people and him the leader of his. Just a thought - I'm sure you've got plenty of plans for the next part!

Looking forward to moving on to the next story.

Cheers.

Loved the story. Very detailed you had me crying during some of it. Hope you keep writing more to the story.

Sequels please. This was so awesome. Thanks for sharing.

I like seeing Jack and John and Caldwell interact so easily. Teyla's thoughts on the coronation are perfectly done. I like how you reveal so much about her feelings that even she does not realize. The dancing scene is wonderful too.

I love that O'Neill is going to be involved. Wonder if he gets treated any more nicely now by the AF and IOA. The best part is how you have him only want Teyla's presence and only trust her to care for him. That fits with how intensely private he is and how he would act. I love how you write her here. Great chemistry and tension between them and the little scene with the invaders is cool.

The genetic memory is cool. I wish we could hear who some of his well-known ancestors were. Makes sense since he has a very posh and privileged background so he would have aristocratic blood from that.

I love that you write this from Teyla's POV so we get the extra insight of the deep connection and love she shares with John. I also like how you hint that they are in love but so deeply in denial they refuse to see it. The mental parts are wonderful particularly the math problems. I think John was already smarter than Rodney since it's so effortless for him, even if he would never admit it.

The part with the horses was great also and fits nicely with Outcast. It also makes sense since much of horseback riding is the mental connection with and manipulation of the horse, much like John's flying.

I love how you write about John enjoying flying and how unpretentious he is. Despite his very privileged background, he seems to prefer acting like a normal person so this all fits.