cool story

OMG!! that was the best story on the planet.

Holly **!! that was so ... AWSOME!
write a sequel ... Please write a sequel.

It means, you send me the story, and I fix the formatting, grammer, spelling errors, everything to make it abso-posi-lutely perfect! =] sound good? and whats your email? and you might wanna take of the "no sending private messages" thing on your profile, cause i'm running out of chapters to review. -__-'

Haha no prob, I practically review everyone. And I make AMVs too! I love them! Now as far as your first story... I can't believe it. I thought it was like, at least maybe your 10th or so. I swear. And if you would like, I could become your beta writer. I'm surprisingly fast at it lol. Oh, and to respond to me, you can AIM or Email me at =]

That was really good! =] The only thing I didn't like was the lack of breaking. If you ever make another story (which I hope you do), please break it so I can read it better? I think that's the only reason that this story wouldn't be rated a 5/5. Please make a new story though!

-Michi

It'd help a LOT if you spaced out your paragraphs. It's very difficult to read. Remember to space everytime there's a new speaker!

~ C.B.

I cannot read this until you have paragraphs...

can you PLEASE have some space between your paragraphs, its so annoying when I read over the same sentence twice because i can't tell were i am because the lack of...SPACE!