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| Spidey3000 2008-07-20 ch 14,  | abuseWow, poor Ash has a crazy fangirl/stalker to deal with...I'm guessing she'll probably be more than just a running gag, as she just went completely insane and almost killed herself, and her sister just called someone who I'm guessing will help her get some sort of revenge on Ash. Update soon! |
| Spidey3000 2008-07-05 ch 13, | abuseToo many big ideas in one small chapter! Oh well, at least Mina isn't dead! I can't wait till you get back to the action parts! Update soon! |
| Spidey3000 2008-06-28 ch 12, | abuseFinally, an update! Wait, Mina's dead? I find that hard to believe. Oh well, at least James did something important! Update soon! |
| Spidey3000 2008-04-21 ch 11, | abuseAh oh. That's never a good thing! I wonder what Hellboy's beef with Spawn is? Oh well, I guess we'll see! Update soon! |
| Spidey3000 2008-04-17 ch 10, | abuseOK, you put Willy Wonka in this...that's taking it too far! Just kidding. Great chapter...I like the AshMina feeling of it, even if they do seem to just be friends...of course, I'm suprised 007 hasn't made any moves on her or Beatrix yet, being 007 and all. Update soon! |
| Spidey3000 2008-02-24 ch 9, | abuseYES! A fight scene! I already forgot who the guy with stitches was though. I like how you made Imhotep just like he was in the movies! Update soon! |
| Spidey3000 2008-02-07 ch 8, | abuseMina and Boiler Plate? You're crazy! And Hammond is from SG1, right? Update soon. |
| wicked-n-lazy 2008-01-03 ch 7, | abuseWell, cross overs are fine, but you have too many...but thats just my opinion. Good to see you;re still at trying at it. |
| Spidey3000 2007-12-31 ch 7, | abuseWow, this thing has more X-overs than all my stories put together! Update soon. |
| wicked-n-lazy 2007-12-28 ch 6, | abuseHey, it's good to see you've updated and you're moving along pretty well, but I do have a few little points of constructive criticism to give: The story doesnt seem to run very smoothly in dialogue a few times, like, within a sentence two different people will speak and it can be a little confusing at times. I'm a little thrown by your interpretation of Hyde...I dont know, it just doesn;t seem to work for me...he doesn;t really have pent up anger, he is pent up anger, do you know what I mean? I don;t quite know how to guide you on this because you might have a different motive, but it just doesnt ring right with the character for me.. Also, you know already I can struggle with your numerous characters and you said yourself you like big stories and haveonly added a couple more but...try to be careful with your writing! Wth so many people, they;ll be fighting to all reading time and you and the readers may get tangled and thrown around a lot... Anyway, I hope you';re ok with what I;ve said, because it is meant to be constructive crit, not flaming or bringing you down or anything! Wicked x |
| Spidey3000 2007-12-26 ch 6, | abuseThat was kinda cute...but the arse kickin' is gonna start soon, right? And I wouldn't be reviewing if the story wasn't awesome! Update soon. |
| Spidey3000 2007-12-17 ch 5, | abuseIs Boiler Plate slowly becoming more human? I laughed at the thought of Hyde in a bunny suit. Update soon. |
| Spidey3000 2007-11-24 ch 4, | abuseGreat chapter, Update soon. |
| wicked-n-lazy 2007-10-30 ch 3, | abuseAh...it seems you do hae a lot of characters swimming around..although at least I recognise Rufus and Ray, I have to be honest and say that the story might prove difficlut for me to read again- but I'm going to do so anyway, cuz I dont like to abandon people. :) Good luck! |
| Spidey3000 2007-10-23 ch 3, | abuseWow, Mattias has one messed up child hood. And are Spawn and Nicky gonna join up? I'd like to see them in future stories. I just realized that I know who Rufus and Serendipity are: they are both from the movie "Dogma". Update soon. |