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Reviews For: Bulldog

the grey mage 2008-05-25 ch 2,	abuseread.
the grey mage 2008-04-21 ch 3,	abusemy head... there is no resolution! gah!
the grey mage 2008-04-21 ch 1,	abusethis had me a tad worried when i read thorough half of it. then luna came in and it felt right. dunno how to clarify that.
potterlovegood 2008-04-17 ch 3,	abuseLet me keep this simple; I like this story very much. I wish I could offer you a well rounded critique, but I really can't think of anything to critique. Perhaps the breaks and flashbacks are a bit confusing, but they really don't bother me and I like the flow of the story. Keep writing and maybe I'll come up with something more useful. Update soon please.
CaramelBoost 2008-03-27 ch 1,	abuseHello, I got your PM, but for some reason, it won't let me reply to that, so I figured I'd read and review this first before getting back to you. :] Review: You have an amazing talent. I'm not just saying that, either. Your writing flows well, and nothing seems to just be there for no reason. The length of this, overall, was really fabulous - long chapters are seriously a bonus for me. However, I thought the paragraphs were too long and clumpy; you needed to break it up into smaller, easer-to-read paragraphs otherwise it looks very long and daunting and scares readers off. It's easier to read and comprehend things if you have many smaller paragraphs rather than bigger ones; I'm not too sure why, but I guess that's just how things are :) Also, in the beginning it was hard to get into the story. I didn't understand where things were going and it seemed like a long process of reading each paragraph to find out what you were talking about. Don't get me wrong; I never got bored or anything, it's just I was a bit confused about what you were talking about for awhile. That being said, I love the detail and effort you put into this. Hermione's concern over Harry was very canon and very deep; it made her seem like a very three-dimensional character instead of a regular old boring one. Especially since you had her go into detail about her thoughts; a very Hermione feature :) Ron's casual attitude also seemed very in character and I loved their interaction and Hermione's thoughts on Ron. An avid Hermione/Ron shipper, I tend to jump on any interaction between the two. The parting line was great, "Very Subtle". Not quite a cliffhanger, yet it still makes the reader want to go on and keep reading. I also like the 'private joke' between Harry and Luna. Not quite canon, because they didn't seem uber close in the books, but it's your own touch to the peice and adds flair to the writing. Are you going to make them a couple in this ? Out of curiosity, what does the title have to do with your writing ? I don't mean to criticize your work, it just strikes me as an odd title. Either way, great job on what you've got so far; you have a huge talent and you'll go really far! :) xox GETTING BACK TO YOUR PM: I'm not sure what the correct protocol for that would be, but I'm fine with you adding me to it. However, I didn't get a message for it and when I checked my DocX thing, your penname didn't show up.. ? I'm not sure if it should though, but if you sent me the work you want beta'd, I'm pretty sure the document should be there. I'd love to check out your work; you have an amazing writing style that really leaves me wanting more :D Love to hear back from you soon, Derek. ♥ xox Carrie
RagamuffinSundrop 2008-03-26 ch 1,	abuseHi It's not letting me send you a PM so I'll make this quick I'll be happy to Beta this piece and anything else you need done. I can do it after it is posted or you can just email it to at the following: Email me and I'll send a beta'd version of this back to you.
Miss Informed 2008-03-26 ch 1,	abuseA very interesting character sketch... I enjoyed it very much! I'd love to beta your work for you; I just need you to enable private messaging and also to upload the work in question to DocX. Thanks, Miss Informed

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