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| karemi chan 2008-07-25 ch 12, anon. | abusei love your story!! its amazing! im so eager to know what does the letter says, and waht's up with Ukyo!... keep writing!! n_n |
| io sono mi-cchi 2008-07-17 ch 12,  | abusekeep it up!!~ i love this story btw... update soon :) |
| Dr Facer 2008-06-16 ch 12, | abuseGood story, I like it so far; I somewhat agree with the other guy about the japanese words, but I don't mind them, besides, the story is extremely nice. Felicitaciones. |
| Baitdcat 2008-06-15 ch 12, | abusehey anya! another heart-felt chapter..thank you! and i agree, people who have been mistreated most of their life find that trusting people isn't as easy as it sounds..thanks! I so feel for Ukyou |
| Super Vegeta 2008-06-13 ch 2, anon. | abuseI've started reading this story. It is interesting so I will keep reading. Only one thing, though: You use too many Japanese slang like all those 'jane', 'baka' and the like. They're weird for the narrative and feel somewhat out of place because the characters are already speaking in Japanese, there's no need to stress this further by adding all those innecesary japanese words. I know it's a "cool" way to let us know how big a fan of anime in general you are, but as a writer it boggles down your narrative. Names of places and special techniques should be written in their original language, but all the other japanese words just look out of place and are not needed in my opinion. |
| OOC Guy 2008-06-08 ch 12, | abuseThis is a nice chapter. So, Ryoga's gonna find Ukyo? |
| SithKnight-Galen 2008-06-06 ch 12, | abuseNice chapter. I know that we missed Ranma and Ryouga's talk to help "bury the hatchet' as it were, are we actually going to get the chance to see the letter, or at least what Ukyo has been up to during this time period? |
| 5HourOpera 2008-06-05 ch 12, | abuseIt's getting so JUICY! I LOVE THIS STORY! What's next? I wanna know! What happened to Ukyo? |
| parazesis 2008-06-05 ch 12, | abusenice, I'm eager to see what that letter says. Good job with keeping them in caricter, Personally I'm glad you didn't write out the long ranma-ryoga talk I think I would've shot something. Keep up the good work. |
| 5HourOpera 2008-05-31 ch 11, | abuse*sniff* *SNIFF* Wa! That was so beautiful, yet so sad! WA! YOU'RE MAKING ME EMO! WA! PLEASE, write more! WA! |
| beep 2008-05-30 ch 11, anon. | abuseOMG! this story is SO good! cliffhanger? WAHH. i can't wait for the next chapter! T_T |
| OOC Guy 2008-05-30 ch 11, | abuseT-that...that was...very sad. C-continue please. |
| parazesis 2008-05-29 ch 11, | abuseWow, this is great, I can't wait to see how you work past this. Gosh they're so cute. I'll be watching for more :) |
| SithKnight-Galen 2008-05-29 ch 11, | abuseOuch, talk about pig-headed. Oh man, I can see it now, especially if Akane of all people actually sees Ukyo bolting out of there torn to pieces like how she is. Ranma might be irate, but I think Akane may actually go in and give Ryouga a piece of her mind instead. Besides, it might be interesting to see how Ryoga reacts when he finds out that what he did was actually the cruel end of fates joke and that Ukyo actually WAS wearing her heart on her sleeve for him to crush...on top of the whole curse of P-Chan thing. I am pretty sure that would not be a good effect for him either, but it might make him start reflecting a bit harder. As for Ukyo, oh boy. I feel for her after that. However, I do have to wonder what is going through her mind now. |
| James Birdsong 2008-05-29 ch 11, anon. | abuseOh wow. |