 greysnyper 2008-06-25 . chapter 1Oh, this is so...I'd say "refreshing" though that's riddled in irony for a story of 'being born again into a used body'--which is a line I rather adored.
Overall, the concept is amazing. It's a good choice for a story. You handle it with a simple, dull tone which sets up Johnny's perspective nicely.
I'm not sure if you intended it, but the start of the story seemed a little tedious and drab. Not entirely unbearable, but it lacked the variation, ideas and feeling that you handled by the end of the story. The inclusion of Squee was actually my favourite part, but that may have been Johnny finding a point/meaning to his existence.
I won't say more. This was very much worth reading.
-gs |