Very, very nice begining. I realy like it. That was quite a mind twister at the end. What happens next?

this story seems to have quite a bit of potential, i could all but hear marcus's real voice as i read the ending. So did divided loyalties take place or was talia rescued somehow?

as mentioned though in a previous comment you do need to work on your formatting. multiple speakers should not be speaking in the same paragraph. it may be annoying sometimes to give someone an entire paragrapsh for a small one liner, but aside from good grammar it makes it a lot easier to read cuz it cuts down on the ambiguity of when one char stopped talking and the next starts.

WOW! I am impressed. What an intriguing setup; lost loves, vengeance Marcus and PsiCorp. I really want to sea where you take this story now. More soon, please?

This could turn into a good story, and you have some nice tuns of phrases.

But...

PLEASE... do something about the layout, it is not very easy to read. Then get someone to check it for spelling and punctuation as there are lots of errors.

Look forward to the next chapter.