So, you're playing off the fact that Ed's hands are bloody when he makes the huge circle work in CoS? I've thought about that a lot too.

amazing~!
i love this story and how it's unfolded so far.
hmm... a mother-figure... could it be izumi that was in the flashback?

Noah is being a sissy. Comfort the baby!

Ed, If you go emo and cut yourself, you can do alchemy!

This would be a really good continuation of the anime.

You do have a flare for the cryptic. I like it.

love the story. can't wait fo9r the next chapter.

Yeah, you can control molecule movement... in the episode that Elicia is born in he heats the water, thats speeding the molecules up, so why wouldn't he be able to slow them down?

this is really good. Keep it up.

wow great story.

i can't beleive you found what sloth ment i been looking for that for ages

This is a very interesting story. The storyline is definately original and it's clear that you really enjoy writing it, which gives it more soul than a lot of fics that I've read. You balance drama with humor very well, which is something that I've never been able to do and your dialogue is usually pretty in character.

However, there are a few things that bothered me... While your dialogue is great, having a little less talking and a little more description would do wonders. Talking is often very important in getting a point across, but using facial expression, movement, sight, smell, sound, and touch to say the same thing is usually much more powerful. It also makes things more artful and subtle when reminding the reader of something or bringing in a new plot device, like when Ed didn't remember why he was mad at his dad. That part could have been more successful if there had been some inner-monologue or description of some sort other than just offhand forgetfulness which, even if Ed's memory had been altered by the Gate, is kinda hard to believe. I've been told that I have the same problem with not having enough description and I'm trying to work on it, and I can already see an improvement in my writing... just something to think about.

Another thing that kind of throws me off--and, from reading the reviews, I can see that others feel the same way--is the footnotes and author's notes. I can understand haveing one or two footnotes occasionally, but having several of them in every chapter isn't good. Most of us readers know these things anyway, but if you want to add on some sort of fact like these, I'd suggest putting it in the actual text somehow.

I dunno... I just find it distracting, although it's good to see that you do a lot of research while writing; there are far too many fanfic writers out there who don't know what the heck they're talking about and I am glad to see that you are not one of them

Pretty cool.

hmm...i had guessed at a few of these things, but hadn't made any real guesses because i wanted to wait and see where you went with it...

i think maybe Al remembers when his memories were gone and how hard it must have been to have a big chunk of your life gone like that...

i have to admit, i enjoyed your author note! i love all those little details like "how far is it to central?" and "what's Al's record for cats found in a single day?" i don't know. it's all these little things that make this stuff awesome! anyway, i'm really loving this story, i can't wait to see more!

Oh my gosh! Poor Elicia! Now she has to go through the same kind of thing Ed and Al did when they tried to bring back Trisha!. I wonder what else is going to come of this?.

Ah! So now Ed's the one to pay the price of his memories from crossing the gate, hmm?. Should have seen that coming!. Though in the movie The Gate didn't seem to have taken anything from Ed when he went through the porthole, but maybe that was because he was in those rockets when he went to and back from Amestris in the movie?.

no way! don't re-write it! its really good. i just found it again and REALLY enjoyed the more recent chapters. and i can't WIAT to see what Elycia tried to do! ...i'm such a FMA geek XD. keep writing it the way you currently are, i enjoy reading it :)