i like this a lot -- you can really get a feeling for it. the voice is great, as if it were really Yoh speaking. [then again, maybe not everyone can hear his cute english voice if they try while reading something he's supposed to be saying...0o]
but anyway! i really like the way you have two parts and start both out with "when i was young, i wanted to save the world..."
it makes it seem more... well, poetic in a sense. and it gets a good point across easier too.

Yeah, I kind of thought that Yoh had a heroic streak beneath all that laziness too. I could see this introspective happening in the manga. Nice job.

That was such a cute story.

I usually don't like stories that are really short but yours was different. It was the perfect length.

I think your a talented author. This story was written beautifully.( of course considering I have only read one of your stories that isn't much to go by)

I think this review ended up praising you more than your story.

~Sakura no Umi~