 Lerrinus 2008-04-29 . chapter 1Great story! I enjoyed the character Julia Stinson - she different but she fits right in despite her difference in abilities - doing her job wonderfully too!
You've nailed Horatio's speech patterns perfectly! Great dialogue between Horatio and Julia and I like how everyone got upset over Horatio's order of cleaning out the refrigerator - especially Calleighs reaction, love it!
Your story was a joy to read, keep up the great work! :-D |
 Lakshimbai 2007-10-16 . chapter 1You write Horatio really well - you've got that mix of compassion and humour and determination just right. I like the character of Julia: she was nice and independent, without being perfect. (Being an assistant to a very busy man myself, I also totally see Horatio's point. I swear, nothing gets done without the assistants' help!) And I liked H's last comment, 'Physical difference is only one of the things that can cause those stares'. It gives the impression that Horatio has been on the receiving end more than once, without having to state it baldly.
Is there going to be any more? Hope so! |