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| Foolish Catalyst 2008-04-27 ch 2,  | abuseThis chapter is still brilliant, though not as good as the first one... I wont bother with any ConCrit though, I'm happy as it is! Nice one! 8D |
| Foolish Catalyst 2008-04-27 ch 1, | abuseThis is hilarious! Missing some things perhaps - all thats mentioned are pairings - but I'm hoping the next chapter will fill the gaps a little! I won't be harsh about your spelling, grammar etc. as I know you said English isn't your first language. Taking that into account, this is excellent! So now I'm off to read the next chapter! |
| Cap'n Scurvy Gums 2008-02-28 ch 1, | abuseI give this story a three out of ten.. The plot, which isn't all that great in the first place is filled with holes. The characters are very unlike the way J.K. portrayed them. Also, I can't see Molly getting that angry over a computer. Nor could I see everyone rushing in like that. I realise that this story is probably a spoof, but, even spoofs should have proper grammar and spelling. I will continue to the next chapter, with the thought in mind that first chapters are rarely good to judge the story about. Perhaps you were just unsure of how to start the story and things will even out. |
| Violet44 2007-10-20 ch 2, | abuseHi I have to say that I loved your chapter as well as the story so. Violet44 |
| Ultimate Lover Harry-Hermio... 2007-10-17 ch 2, | abuseThis is a pretty funny parody. You should explore Harry's feelings about how he feels towards J.K. Rowling and the whole thing of his world not existing. Fellow Author, -Ultimate Lover Harry/Hermione |
| The Queen of Confusion 2007-10-17 ch 2, | abuseGreat story!! SARAH |
| Claire Violet Thorpe 2007-10-17 ch 2, | abusegee, i wonder what will happen when molly finds out about the mobile. great story |
| firebaby26 2007-10-16 ch 1, | abusethat was really funny. it would be great to have second one |
| padfoot'smoon 2007-10-16 ch 1, | abuseNice. But, really, come on, it can't be a one shot. All you covered was pairings (and that not completely) You haven't even begun to dip into proper plot material! And song fics... there's so much left! |
| desartratt 2007-10-16 ch 1, | abuseoh, come on! Next chapter should be Arthur getting Molly to try the computer to help run the household. That way she could start to understand that technology can be useful as well as fun. |
| peppaoceangal 2007-10-16 ch 1, | abuseha ha that was hilarious!! ... I loved it ... |