cute!

...a)yukimura actually isn't that great in math, b)yukimura is screwing with kirihara (regarding the math), or the worst-case scenario of c) the author...in nicer words, isn't great in math either...

Me: Eh... no.. 4x 1 isn't the answer!
Kirihara: EH?!?!?!
Me: it's x 4. 5,9,13,17,21 4x 1 doesn't work!
Yukimura: did i look at it wrong?

(I really don't know their personalities yet... i just started liking it... well... i liked it long ago... but eh...)

Reviewing because I added to the C2 for the simple fact that it was Uke Pair.

Anyway...well...it wasn't great. Not trying to be mean, but you've definitely got a LOT to work on. Characterization were well...bad. Grammar could use a bit of work. And your HUGE A/N at the beginning was HUGE no-no (it's longer than the freaking story!). As are Author's Notes in the actual story. They're tacky, lame, and yeah. I was debating about putting this one in the C2, but did anyway just because it was Uke Pair, and I have a special place in my heart for them (and because I like seeing people using the name I created. :P)

~KA

Very cute story but the answer to your math problem isn't 4x+1 its the n(the number before the next number)+4. Like 5+4=9, 9+4=13, 13+4=17... so answer would be N+4 not 4x+1 which would look like this 5x4=20+1=21 not 9. Yet the story is very sweet

GREAT STORY CHRIS :)
anyway, i didn't know you liked Akaya and Yukimura. i personally like SanaYuki...OshiAto as well, but i love TezuFuji the most. :DD
lol the first bit was funny...except i just don't know what Sanada said means. Mura-buchou was really cute xD
MUAHAHAHAHAHA, WRITE MORE!

=Q= luv it!
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