Reviews for Keep On Trying

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mars on fire 2008-06-28 ch 22,	abuseI really like Two-Bit's humour with the guidance counsellor ... and the fact that I think it shows his feelings on his future really well, and it's a totally sad outlook. Not that I can blame him. I love all the stuff at the football game, and the fact that things are reminding Two-Bit of Johnny and Dally. The stuff with Bonnie finding out Marty is hurt was great too. There's a nice build of tension as she can sense something isn't right the minute she sees Dale.
Maxiekat 2008-06-27 ch 22,	abuseI love the humor of the opening scene. Two-Bit is hilarious with his guidance counselor and I love his attitude toward school. And the humor at the beginning made me sort of forget about the last chapter and Marty ... just for a minute. And I think that made me let my guard down which was a perfect lead-in to the ending. Poor Bonnie and poor Marty. I'm can't wait for your next chapter (hint, hint lol)
xocrazililkelox 2008-06-27 ch 22,	abuseI really enjoyed this chapter you can feel what Bonnies going through and I liked that you showed Two-Bit's serious side, I hope you update soon pretty please?
mars on fire 2008-06-24 ch 21,	abuseI really liked Marty's POV ... and I like all the stuff going on with him. It definitely has this feeling of him being in a different place than everyone else and feeling different. Great job with the research on the medications (research! It's not just for school papers!). I also love all the moments with Two-Bit and his mom. I think Two-Bit is very loathe to become any kind of a role model. I like that he and his mom fight, but they aren't cruel with each other - it's a very good parent/child relationship. Great chapter :)
Maxiekat 2008-06-21 ch 21,	abuseYou did a fantastic job with Marty's pov and I love that it ties in so well with what you've written in previous chapters. Something was obviously not right with him and you expertly planted all the little clues to the problem throughout the story. For me to want to give an OC a hug is a rare thing, but he definitely needs one, lol. And I'm so worried for him and the rest of his family. That last sentence isn't instilling a lot of confidence in me, lol.
OnCeInAbLuEmOoN14 2008-06-21 ch 21,	abusewow this is REALLY good!! keep writing! ;)
xocrazililkelox 2008-06-21 ch 21,	abuseYay good fic that makes me happy,lol.I really enjoyed this chapter and how you have a plot line for all your charcters and not just Bonnie. I like how she's not the center of attention and that Marty and Dale have their own story to tell as well. I loved the light funny bit with Two-Bit and Steve. You show the seriousness side of Two-Bit very well.I hope you update soon pretty please? PS- Did I mention SOON?lol.
Maxiekat 2008-05-21 ch 20,	abuseSorry it took me a while to review this. Another great chapter. I love the way the story of Marty keeps getting more and more complex and that you add to the tension and uncertainty with each chapter. I also really like the way you've continued to have Bonnie interact with Evie and Kathy and that you've made them into believable, three dimensional characters. And, as ever, your characterization of the three guys is so much fun to read. Can't wait for the next chapter.
mars on fire 2008-05-17 ch 20,	abuseGreat chapter. I like that we're slowly getting an idea of what Marty is involved in. I only caught one mistake - first you said $60 then changed it to $40. I also like that Two-Bit didn't come along to rescue her, she didn't start judo chopping her way out of the trouble she was in etc. It's a reasonable explanation that a guy would try and scare her into delivering a message - if Marty's messing around with the wrong people, things could go really wrong. I also like the mention of Pony and his theme - I like the idea that life was going on for everyone while he was first in his daze, then working on the theme. I never thought much about what everyone else would be up to.
xocrazililkelox 2008-05-16 ch 20,	abuseI really enjoyed this chapter,I think you handle the corning scene really well.I liked how you gave a reason and built up to this moment and it wasn't a random punk just wanting to give Bonnie a hard to time.I also liked how you threw in a family dynamic about Dale.Please update soon pretty please?
margototheleft 2008-05-09 ch 1,	abuseThis is amazing characterization of Two-bit, andI love your OFC too. She's not annoying at all and very tolerable. I also admire her relationship with her brothers. I must say, your a pretty stellar individual.
mars on fire 2008-04-30 ch 19,	abuseI like the play between Two-Bit and Bonnie a lot. I also like how you set up the chapter - Bonnie goes home to her brother and his troubles, Two-Bit goes home to his sister. There's very different vibes, but they nicely frame each other.
OrangeLaces 2008-04-30 ch 19,	abuse'If anyone had ever wanted something to show how perceptions could be wrong, this exact moment of a tattooed teenager beautifully playing the piano would express it perfectly.' Great line right there. I think I'm a little obsessed with the concept of perceptions being so unceasingly wrong. Maybe it's because of people I know ... but, rather get melodramatic and self-centered here, I'll just say you really put it perfectly. Maybe I'll use it like a quote and recite it to people and then when they ask who said it I can say Another Illusion. How mysterious and cool would that sound? :) Anyhow, I better get serious. As always, your portrayal of Two-Bit is THE best in fanfiction. I know a lot of authors delve for the 'deeper Two-Bit' and show an angsty side, but I've never really dug that. I always saw Two-Bit just you've written him. And I'm starting to get into Peggy too. You opened up her character really well. I have no idea if that makes sense but it seems like in every chapter you show a new side of her and Two-Bit's relationship with her. So now you not only have my personal (sorry, it probably doesn't stand for much, lol) judgement of the best Two-Bit, you have one of the best Two-Bit's sister. Wow, I hope that makes sense. I'm rambling ...
xocrazililkelox 2008-04-30 ch 19,	abuseGreat update. I like the scenes with Two-Bit and Boonie their so cute together .They belong together like peanut butter and Jelly,lol. I hope you update soon pretty please?
Maxiekat 2008-04-30 ch 19,	abuseI love how you juggle all these different relationships and give each one the attention it deserves. Poor Two-Bit and his car, lol. Maybe it is time to look into getting a new one. The scene with him, Steve, and Soda was great. - This exchange was adorable: “I’ll take note of it. What is a safe conversation then?” Bonnie asked, feeling more relaxed again. “Um, all comments about my general sexiness are acceptable,” Two-Bit said cheerfully and Bonnie laughed out loud. “I’ll do my best there,” she said shyly, certain she was blushing again. - And finally, the scene with Marty and Bonnie was, once again, so well done and really made me feel for both of them. I can't wait to find out what is really going on, but a part of me enjoys the build-up and the layers you add with each chapter. Great job!

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