A great story. Very good.

HI!

YOU'RE HERE!

YAYNESS!

Btw, it's me, Katherine, lol.

I don't normally read Buffy, but this is cool I suppose, but there were a few issues with it, and before you groan in shame, I will tell you that the errors you made are typical (excuse the pun) school boy errors for new fanfic authors.

the spacing in the text was stuck together, in fanfic you need to press enter twice in word so that there's a gap between each section of text or speach, this amkes it infinitely better to read.

Other than that this ROCKED dude.

You've opened it up nicely, there's a little hint of intrigue at the end that make the reader wonder w.(why)t. f. is Willow doubting herself, and they should want to carry on reading.

However, there is one slight snag with this that I didn't notice at first cos all I did was see the name, but is't to do with the summary of the story.

You need to keep in mind that the summary is the first anybody ever sees of the fic, it's the thing that's meant to grab their attention.

Explaining that you're a first timer and that you are a little shaky on your feet is not the best way to get anywhere in fanfic, the summary should be filled with wonder, something really cool that takes the reader to the heart of the story, to make them click on that blue link in the first place.

You can put that it's you're first ficv in the AN at the begining of the story, but it doesn't belong in the summary.

oh, and another thing, you should write stuff in your profile, that's what it's , meant for, to give you a chance to tell the fanfic world about yourself, doing that may give them an idea of whether or not you'd be a good author.

Mine's not the best on Earth, but if you want an example I suppose mine will ahve to suffice, I can't be bothered to find any particularly great ones right now.

Anyhow, I hope this didn't wound your pride too much, but you should have properly run this past me, or you could try and get a beta to proof-read it for you, I'd offer, but I already have an author I'm beta-ing, as well as the stuff with the guild, and all the ucas crap I gotta do this year, so I really can't do it myself, Lizzie might, but you'd have to ask her, but if she doesn't then blame a guy on here named Briankrause (that's his penname, has nothing to do with his real name) for ** me off so much with his grammer that I had to try and put a stop to it, lol.

Anyway, I hope this was useful to you.

See you on wednesday (hopefully)

Katherine, or 'Dandilion' as I've been called since sunday evening, lol.

Bye, *mega loads of hugs*