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| Mew Mai 2008-08-23 ch 3,  | abuseI really like this story so far! It's like a combination of really sweet, and a little awkwardness that makes it funny. |
| MewAddict 2007-11-16 ch 1, | abuseI Dont Really Understand Any Of It Unless This Is The Sequel To How Retasu Midorikawa And Pai Had Suddenly Formed Into A Love Couple. If There Is, Please Inform Me Immediately. To Improve Your Stories You Need Maybe More Descriptive Vocabulary If You Get What I Mean. |
| MewAddiction 2007-11-14 ch 1, | abuseThis Story Kind Of Confuses Me But It Was Good. |
| Drifting One 2007-10-28 ch 1, | abuseI liked it very much! But Pai seemed really OOC... it's alright though... |
| hiatus-desu 2007-10-24 ch 1, | abuseWow, that was a cute piece of RetPai fluff. Good job on that. I'd still run a spelling and grammar check through if I were you, as I found a few typing errors - and watch Pai's character. I know that he and Retasu are together and it's a great chance to get fluff in, but I still have trouble picturing him being so ... romantic. You have awesome potential; so keep going. |
| Heavenly-little-war-like-on... 2007-10-23 ch 1, | abuseCOOL! |
| eevee-puff 2007-10-23 ch 1, | abuseBut it was such a good first chapter!! :0 Mm. . .You usually write angst, so it made me happy when I read some cute fluff. And man that was CUTE :3 Eevee wants more :D |