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| Bow and Arrow Archer Girl 2007-11-16 ch 3,  | abuseWow, you're doing great! A few things I'd like to point out, though, is that in this chapter there are a few spelling mistakes, and in the last part: -'The man gulped as he took the envelope. The man turned away and disappeared down an ally. The man watched the man disappear '- you have to use a synonym, or an adjective along the lines of 'other' to show what man you mean. It works okay for this chapter, but for other chapters and/or stories, take in to thought about that kind of series. It doesn't always sound great and is sometimes confusing. Anyway, I'm very much likeing this fanfic. Keep up the wonderful work |
| Morgomir 2007-11-16 ch 3, | abuseGreat chapter. Keep up the great work. Sorry for the long wait till revieuw. |
| Bow and Arrow Archer Girl 2007-11-04 ch 2, | abuseBeautifully written! There were very few mistakes, and it flows really nicely. Great work! |
| Morgomir 2007-11-03 ch 2, | abuseI'm verry interested in the next chapter. keep up the good work. It's 4:18 AM here and I'm still working on my thesis. :-( I hate school. |
| Univerasal Disaster 2007-11-01 ch 1, | abuseshort lived. yep that about sums those stars up! XD |
| Morgomir 2007-10-25 ch 1, | abuseWow! Great start. Keep up the good work. |