Very good.. UPDATE!

Good start. Now.. I read on!

That luxray is so cute!(Sarah,...)

I just beta the rockets in red so i'm familliar with that scenario. Nice to have you back. Can't talk much, real big hurry. I'll leave more comments on Devart. Well, happy holidays! Jonseycat, out! MEE-YAA!

Glad to see another chapter! Hope you're able to find more time to get up the chapters faster, and I'll be waiting for the next one!

GIOVANNI! I BET IT'S GIOVANNI! O_O

-eevee rox

Dear Swack16,

I like this story even better than I did AORYP. Most of the allusions to Espeon Masters Tough Love fit and I love your allusions to the original show. (That really was the only one to see, but Johto was ok. *It was because of Chikorita/Bayleef *_). This Luxray seems even more affectionate than Sarah, but then again, I didn’t read this while writing Quarantine. (Funny that what happened to Nathan in this battle also happened in Quarantine with Shadow and Kitsune.) Now some grammatical errors exist ( Minor stuff like a missing letter for plurals or another version of the word you intended to use, and that little demon called punctuation.), but hey, we’re all human and it doesn’t detract from the overall experience. I look forward to more work from you.

(A Quilava and Luxray are walking down the path)

Sarah: Oh come on, I’m not really THAT affectionate towards my master, am I?

Cindy: Well… (Looks to the side)

Sarah: Hey, you saved me and you don’t see me licking you when I battle!

Cindy: True, but I’m a girl so…

(Sarah fumes)

Sarah: Well let’s go.

(Walks away while a tired Eevee barely comes along.)

Eevee John…*pant*…wait…*pant*…

(A Doduo runs by and one of the heads looks confused at the Eevee)

Doduo John: Duo?

Eevee John: Huh?

Mary: Duo?...ack! I’m….I’m…isn’t that …

Doduo John: Duo! Gah…That’s me! Duo!

(Both heads start squawking and the Doduo takes off.)

Eevee John: …?... What just happened? (Passes out)

Me: Heh-heh. MEE-YAA!

i'm back! thanks for sorting everything out.that helped alot! it may not last for much longer but it certainly is good!

-eevee rox

Haha...looks like this leg of the story is nearly over. You haven't update in a while, but neither have I; I shouldn't really be the one talking. Anyways, great job with this story; you still need to finish your other one.

alright! a new chapter!

writer's block? i know how that feels. sometimes u just gotta force yourself to write, but then it could be bad, so i'll just stay quiet on that subect. ;

ooh! what is giovanni going to do?...it is giovanni, right?

now, u still need to work on a couple of things. first off, remember grammer and details. details are vital!

also (just an suggestion) since u were in a small writer's block, maybe u should've gone ahead and written out the battle at the water gym.

Well, it certainly had less errors than your past chapters.

However, it seems like you just wrote this chapter to put up an update and get reviews, as it was very short and frankly didn't develop the plot very much. The only part which really helped the plot along was that part at the end with the scientist.

Not to mention it was shorter than it seemed, as you had the explanations there at the beginning. I'm not saying those were bad; you haven't updated in a while, and I'm probably not the only one who needed a quick reminder of what happened. They were helpful. Also, good job not lingering on author's notes; I do that a lot in my fic...

What's so bad about getting morphing powers.

Sadly to say, the Cerulean Gym Battles are truly pathetic what with a Gym Leader like Lily leading it. But moving on...

Well, that's a nice summary of the timeline. I think I get it? No, I think I got it. Sarah's not present? There's the bad foreboding. I'm sure something is going to happen next...in the next chapter.

Hmm, interesting chapter. Can't wait to read the next one!

hey, man!

alright, another update sweet! lol

team rocket again, huh? stealing pokemon as usual. lol

this is pretty good, i thought it u were going to get caught by team rocket, luckily those other pokemon were there.

u still need to work on ur past and present tense verbs, and work on details. just get those down and u've got a wonderful story!

Hahaha, just give the villain a name, any name, but a name that fits what they do, like Whip who uses a whip! The bleep. Well...you could just type in asterisks. Actually, sometime back, I made up this funny 'cursing' code. Basically I just type a certain number of symbols and then assign a curse to those set of symbols. It was for something else though, not Pokemon. All I know is, that character that uses this 'cursing code' really needed it, since in one particular game, he cusses...a lot. -;

Or you could just use asterisks. Looking forward to the next chapter.