wow you really havent read it in a long time

Cute... :) Only Ranma would turn a come on into a duel, and "Ranma Saotome doesn't lose!"

Nice job.

This is pretty unique both in that Nabiki's motivation is what it is, and it actually gets pointed out to her in-story in a rather... intimate way.

If it's anything like this, then I'm definitely looking forward to Ranma 1/2: Nabiki Edition when it becomes (or begins to become) available.

Man this was good, I liked it, I would definatly want to see more of this, another chapter or sequil perhaps, but a cuntinuation of this is in order, keep up the good work

Nice first try, although the plotline seemed a little too short and sex between characters like Ranma and Nabiki should be described like how one of would describe a bloody war-zone.
There should also be some psychological exchange within the mnds of both characters in a situation like this and also, more backfiring is expected to occur in this series which made the fic quite unrealistic an plain in comparison to the regular dimension where the series is situated.

Having said all that, I still say it's a pretty good first try so don't waste that potential and...

WRITE, WRITE, WRITE!

i liked the way you placed ranma's mind. alot!

i enjoyed the story, even though i can't stand when people pairs ranma with someone else rather than akane.

keep writing. (c:

aynomayac

Very nice story. Glad to see I'm not the only one with that interpretation of Akane. Keep on chugging if you would, I liked this story and look forward to seeing what happens next or even just an expansion on what has already occured.

I found it pretty unique and enjoyable. Well done.

“Because I’ve been a total ** to you?”

> Make Nabiki more sarcastic and I would believe this.

Very solid writing, and even though Ranma is slightly OOC as others have mentioned, it's not completely outside the realm of believability. Pacing was perfect, and the idea behind the story itself is golden.

I'm really hoping you continue this!

o this is great but it could be bater if you actually wrote a lemon in it and continue the story with Nabiki challenging Ranma to all kind of relation ship things and ending with her always on her back in bed with him lol

I got a kick out of your short story and I really have to say that I kind of want you to continue the story. To find out the different types of why Nabiki will get back at Ranma and vise versa. It just thought, but like I said it is good.

Congratulations on a well-written first story; may your pen never run dry (or, may your keyboard never get sticky).

That is an interesting and seldom-used way to get Ranma and Nabiki into a relationship. You should definitely explore this idea more in a continuation.

Yeah they were.. well Ranma was, out of character... and i could personally see Nabiki taking the wild-horse for a ride. Overall I like this story and would like to see a pre-story or even the next part of the challenge!

Nicely done