I loved it, it was very poetic. Keep up the good work! ^/^

Aw!^^ it's so kawaii!^^

Wonderfully written - a smile just for Pein. Lol, I quite like that

AWE!! This is the first Pein and Konan story I read, and now I like them even more! It's just so weird seeing them this way, but hey, every bad guy has something that makes him happy! I loved it!!

Kratos Wilder

Damnit, this is so original with such good language and shit. Unfortunately, yeah, you're right about it being a little uneasy to follow, but it's far too late for me to point out anywhere in particular. Dx Sorry.

But this is really good. n.n'

Yays. I love PeinKonan, I love poetic crap, and I love oneshots. Figures someone would put them all together. XD Awesomeness. This fanfic is now Ryo-approved. *thumbs up*

~Ryo

I think the story is really great, and I usually don't prefer one-shots.Though, I think Pein wouldn't have too much trouble making up some poetry. After all, he is a "god". :)

For a beginer very good, but for a skilled novelist not so much

I don't really mind the way the story shifts; I seems to notice when it does. I'm sure other people would too. :) Lovely story. It's sugar sweet. Lol. ::hands you internet cookies::

YAY! Smile Konan! SMILE! *cheers* a cute one-shot! YAY!

Lovely story
I like how you set it out, kinda kept the sense of suspense...well for me anyway